I like her personality when she says "why should I enlighten them". But really a 400 room mansion? Really? eating lunch with the prez? really? yeah right. The queen of england? yeah right. being insanely rich is semi possible tho. also, blue eyes, blond hair, bubble but, big boobs. nothing over average. YEAH RIGHT. that's ..not average. unless you have features like that, then go right ahead and claim that those features are average.

Omg I loved it! Update soon!

Meh...too bubbly. I was going to start branching out and read different types of stories but this scared me back into my little...seed. Only a few paragraphs in and I could already see the oh-no!-i'm-just-a-pretty,-big boobed,-little,-poor-girl-go-away plot with the bad guy turning good and kisses and magic girl sparkles. This is a perfect example of why I only read stories with guys as the main character. .

Why do the stories I like NEVER UPDATE? *cries* Please don't tell me this story is on a hiatus, cuz that'll be awful! D: Please update!

No one can be on both the soccer and football teams in high school. The school wouldn't let them play TWO fall sports. The practices and games would happen at the same time so it wouldn't be possibe.

Sounds great! Off to read the rest now...

Love the story! Good job! Update soon!

Peace,

Bubbly Girl

lol update?

xx

Don't stop doing review responses, they're great!

And your story's awesome!

I think that this form of revenge is definitely the best.

And who IS Malorie's secret crush?

This is a great story, PLEASE UPDATE SOON!

woot woot.

Great story...luv it...update please

please update this story. it has just gotten to a really interesting part. i really want to know what happens to Jason and Harmony.

This is an interesting concept you've got started, but the one thing that leapt out at me immediately is that there is way too much information in this first chapter. Do we really need to know the names of her arch-nemesi in the very first chapter? Will we meet all the people mentioned? Are they all going to be playing an integral part? Think about that, and I suggest that a few of the unimportant characters are tossed out. I know that people like Marjorie tend to have a large cult of followers, so you could imply how large it was but you don't need to name every single one of them. Less stress on you to work them into the story, and less strain on the readers' memory trying to remember who each character is.

this story's really good! Please continue updating...