*cries* What happened! I demand you update this story, lest I be forced to hunt you down, glue your butt to your computer chair, and MAKE you update it!

:subliminal:WRITE MORE:subliminal:

Hmm, a good two chapters, I especially liked #7, however, the latest one bothered me a bit. I was skimming hrough the other chapters again earlier in the week, and noticed it then, but #8 made it a bit more obvious. All of your characters so far seem to be beautiful. All of them. And I guess that's just one of my biggest pet peeves about writing, because it just isn't realistic.

On a less... I don't know... peeved note, cliches are BAD! No more cliches! Things like, 'curtain of ebony silk' and 'sapphire orbs' are used suprisingly often in stories, and it get's old fairly quickly.

One thing that confused me was you called Idan, from Lissa's point of view, human. I assume he isn't human, obviously, but it still threw me off.

Okay, I'm done complaining. I still liked the chapters and such, just so's ya know! Concerning the pics I'm drawing, the BASIC things you need to describe about your characters are things like length of hair, shape of eyes, shape of face, and body type. I've already drawn a picture of Yuliya :P

Woah... okay... I think I missed something... and I'm probably going to sound like a complete idiot, but... is Kintrel Idan's bother? or are they the same person... or do they both just have the same last name? It's a little confusing... but then again I'm a naturally confused person. heehee...

HOLY COW HOLY COW! I actually had a point to my ramblings for once! That has to be some kind of record or something... Woohoo! Go me!

*claps* Is it just me, or do the Izeians just seem to come across as a big bunch of bastards? Again, my opinion only... :P

It's odd how I can't really picture writing a story without planning out what my characters look like. Generally, once I get a good story going on in my head, the -first- thing I do is go into more detail as to what they look like.

Bye the way, what -is- a zhent? I'm leaning towards either about a minute or an hour...

Oh, alright, you win, I feel sorry for Lyu. And Yuliya reminds me so much of one of my own characters it's creepy.

Seriously.

Anyway, another great chapter, and I'll have you know that I was checking in all weekend for it. Glad to see it was worth the wait (Woo-hoo for character depth!). As always, you must update soon!

That's... really... weird... I just get this mental image of... I don't know, a slinky, or... or Jello... or a slinky made of Jello?

Uh... no, no, that can't be right...

Anyway... A contract, eh? If it weren't for the fact that there was possibility of death, I'd say it was a pretty good deal! Ahaha, kinda reminds me of LOTR when Gimli's all, "Certainty of Death, small chance of success, what are we waiting for?" Or something like that. Gimli's so cool like that... hee... Except he didn't have a contract... he was doing it for *noble* causes, unlike some ruddy politicians I might mention...

What was I saying? I don't know, I think I lost it somewhere... figures...

Hmm, yes, Konen is a good character. *pats* I think I'd like to draw him and Dareia, and maybe Lady Yuliya as well. Until your next updat, I shall entertain myself by drawing *examples* of Izeians and Alaneans. Good chapter, I'll add as long as I'm typing... new characters! Yay!

*cough*

Oh, and by the way TYPING-MONKEY, your story has begun to invade my dreams.

I hope you're pleased with yourself...

Aw... But reall, I think she's doing the right thing... thing is, he didn't even *wait* for her permission, so bleah on him. But yeah... so... a new character, eh? Yup.

Oh, and by the way, don't worry about me bashing Konen cuz' he's awesome! woo! Just... don't make him too unfortunate because that would be sad. That's what I always do to my favorite character, and then I read what I wrote and I'm like... What? NO! because sometimes they end up getting killed. Or they convert to the dark side. Or they change completely. Or fill in the blank here. It's like I'm doomed to kill off my favorite characters. And it reall stinks. So yeah, don't do that. 'Twould be sad.

*snort*

Lyu remainds me of someone I know in real life... which is kind of scary because now I wish that something really bad happens to him. *sigh* I must take my misplaced anger elswhere. Can't wait for the next chapter! If you gave a maro detailed description of your characters, I might be able to draw some gift art for ya!

:P

Bleah... Me no likies Lyu... But oh well... heh, as always, there's a rabid goat doing a tap dance on your head with a pineapple and a sign that says "Beware of the Leper." Heh... yeah... don't worry, it's a good thing...

*claps*

Yes! You must continue! I like the way you write, with the exception of a few repetitive phrases. All in all, very good so far.

oh, melikes the cliff-hanger-y ending... not much time now, so I will leave nothing more than a simple, cliche, "good job, thumbs up, keep going..."

...and a "there's a rabid goat on your head doing a tap dance holding a pineapple that says, 'beware of the leper'"... but that's beside the point, really...

Yay, finally, a sci-fi-ish story that focuses on the characters as WELL as the story... All too often I see stories that just describe the situation, and it always seems like a bunch of political jabber, which can be immensely boring. And your characters aren't insufferable goody-goodies like a bunch! It's all muddled and stuff! Yay! It's like... You could have been telling it from the bad guy's perspective for all I know, but in real life, there really aren't definite good or bad guys, are there... Oh no... wait... I've just been giving my cliched "The Muddled Line" speech again, which I have used so many times, yes... I have a name for it. It's pathetic, really. But I'm getting better at cutting that speech off while it's still just getting started. Yeah, there was a bunch of it after that. It's murder, or so I've been told by those unfortunate enough to be on the receiving end.