chilling, the last line was painfully good.

I like it! Keep up the great work!

Wow, this is a beautifully dark piece. I love your imagery - rots, sickness, beast, souls, pale, etc - it all comes together to create one over-image that really expresses your point wonderfully. By the way (and you might get a lot of people telling you this, so sorry in advance ;P) "writheling" is not a word. I think you meant "writhing", but the point works just as well ;P Really great poem; keep it up.