hmm funny :3

that was interesting. you were right on the summary, it really is short. But anyway, I think that this would be a really great idea for a poem. It almost has a poetic rhythm at the beginning. The ending was kind of random, but good all the same.

that was...interesting to say the least. it was so short it almost seemed like if you'd change a few things you'd have a poem. The pizza man part could have used a wee bit of clarification because when i read it i was like..."wait, what?" but other than it was fun. my favorite part was the very first line, i dont know why but i thought that part was awesome - it's what caught my attention

~Mack

PS thank you so much for your continued reviews! I know the relationship between Ravi and Ryder seems odd right now but it will later be explained. he was joking about hanging his slave - he'll do it a few more times. and, yes, action will return.

Heh... Thas funny. u made a funny! I usually prefer being alone, though. Then I let my imagination work out the stories i put on this site

Well, that was quite random...

I think the first part (before the mention of pizza man) is quite true, and realistic.