|Reviews for Optimism|
| luv me like no other chapter 1 . 9/12/2007
Aw.. this was nice of you to dedicate such a pretty poem to your friend. it cheers one up!
| heart shaped lies chapter 1 . 2/3/2007
love it, especially the lines:
Fire might cause great destruction
But only to make way for life
this is definitely something Ican relate to!
| hoowdoideletethisaccount chapter 1 . 3/14/2006
Mm, how absolutely true! Man, it's nice to see someone write some happy poetry! I'm a huge fan of the ideals of hope. :)
| N. Steven chapter 1 . 11/29/2005
part of me wants to ask if i can cut, copy and paste this and show this to a friend of mine who is HORRIBLY pessimistic...but then i realized that it'd mean more if it came from me. which is why i hate you for writing it first. i'm just kidding...beautful job, as always...MORE!
| Nightmare Alley chapter 1 . 11/27/2005
I realized recently that I was probably depressed (being completely miserable most of the time was a big enough clue, I think), so I've been working at being a little happier.
This poem has just lifted my mood a whole lot, and I'm favoriting it to read on a particularly bad day.
| KalliopesMuse chapter 1 . 11/12/2005
Hello! I thought you deserved at least one more review. I really like this poem and it's going on my favorites list. The flow of it is very good and it's very uplifting when a lot of other [angst] poetry seems to bring you down to a depressing state. The imagery is also very effective. It was very nice of you to write this for your friend and it should be shared with all the pessimistic friends/people everywhere. Keep up the good work and happy writing! - Sarika
| Yuval chapter 1 . 11/12/2005
Nice sort of clean poem that at first sounds simple, but really isn't. Like the person below me said, you don't overload it with overly flowery lyricism - it's a verse, not a hedge - but you communicate the ideas very effectively. It's deep, and even without the floweriness, it's very very pretty.
| Goddess Aurora chapter 1 . 11/5/2005
I like this poem very much. It's very meaningful. How nice of you to write this for your friend. Every pessimistic person should read this, and their day will lighten up.
| ice flyer chapter 1 . 10/14/2005
i LOVE this poem. it's not too flowery, but the vocabulary is precise and perfect. i also love the message and the rhyming, and wow. real poetic skill in this one, great job!
| Pure Autumn chapter 1 . 9/24/2005
Nice imagery - im pessimistic too so i can sort of relate to that
| Akuya-san chapter 1 . 9/11/2005
Oh wow. This is so cool! Write more!
| Barbados chapter 1 . 8/22/2005
I've been meaning to read some of your things for a while now after seeing mention of you in a certain gun wielding dancer's profile (as well as receiving the link to your Writing With Diversity from a certain Lord of the Demonic Planes who fancies the word Harr.)I have to say, it blew me away. You know what I mean when I say there's a lot of poetry out there that isn't, well.. poetic. That's certainly not the case here. This is brilliant. The only suggestion I could possibly make could perhaps be just opinion, but: remove the contraction from line 4 of the first stanza, and from line 3 of the second stanza. To me, the having the extra sylable in each line helps the flow, but maybe it's just how I'm reading it.
| Pheobe Meryll chapter 1 . 8/14/2005
I didn't think I'd like this "pome" by the title...I hate the categories optomist & pessimist. I'm not either one - I say that the glass has water in it and the water reaches the middle. But it's a beautiful poem and far deeper than the terms of optomist & pessimist. You have a really nice rhyme scheme and rythm...and I liked the line "dark shadows aren't always evil/when they're formed by the light of the day." Never really thought about that. Sorry I can't offer any criticism - I loved it!
| E1pnvn chapter 1 . 8/5/2005
I'm really not a poet. Although I pride myself on my limricks, I'm really bad at anything serious and, in all other respects, poetic. So, in short, I usually think that all legible poems are good. But, even I could tell that this poem was EXCELLENT. It was even better than your last one! It was written extremely well and sent a feel-good message and, most importantly, I understood it perfectly. I feel so giddy!
But, how am I supposed to give constructive criticisim? Um... er... uh... it was too perfect. There, that's my criticism. Sorry, but I just can't find anything that needs improvement (not for a lack of trying, trust me). So there. Wonderful job yet again!
| Clodhopper chapter 1 . 8/5/2005
this was so good! oh, i love reading poems that aren't all angst. tho angst certainally has its nice points, i love to read things like this. im afraid im not much of a poet - i just enjoy reading poems - so i cannot give you very much CC. good job!