Heh. I had nothing better to do, so I searched through some other stories. I started reading this one and just now I realized who the author was p. I love this story just as much as your other one. Good job, keep up the work! 3

omg...i love it! i couldn't stop reading...I love Maleran she is awesome and marcus seems like a player...great job!

Hey..I'm back again, after a long absence (sorry about that). anyway, it seems like every new character that you introduce is multi-dimensional and real sounding. Brian is very entertaining...I liked reading about him this chapter. The story is coming along nicely.

I hope that Reisshen isn't out of the plot for good- I really liked her.

It is interesting how you characterize Marcus, falling for two girls in a short space of time. I wonder which one he will actually choose. The chapter was good grammar-wise, and I love your dialogue. It's so expressive. Although something feels like it is not right- like you are withholding information or something, and something bad might happen. This chapter made me suspicious. Well, good job

nice chapter.

My only cc's: I would have liked to hear more detail about the plant spirit, but since that's only a minor thing in the plot, it's okay.

"She was somewhat shorter than most women as well, but very beautifully built for one of her size. She wore rather plain hunting clothes, and a beautifully made but well used cloak of an odd color that blended in with the foliage."-you used beautifully twice here, and it stood out as being repetitive.

Otherwise, good job!

hiho, I really like this story, also I really wonder where the main romance is gonna start (I'm only at chapter 5... rofl) well I'll review later again

NO! I liked Marcus with Maleran! *pout* But I like Reisshen, too, so I guess it's not a bad plot twist. LOL! You do like to keep us guessing though, don't you?

I found one missing comma error:

"“I’m Caitlin. Maleran is it? That’s an… unusual name"-should be a comma after Maleran.

Otherwise, I really enjoyed this story, and hearing about Maleran's half-human background. I love to see the progression of Caitlin as a character too...it is realistic and very well written. I really don't have any other cc's, and well, I don't really put many stories on my favorites list, but I really think this might become one quite soon. SOrry I haven't caught up to the latest chapter yet, but I've been really busy with school. ANyway, great job.

Wow. That was a feirce. And you left it at such a cliff hanger! Caitlin's really starting to grow into herself, with the help of Torren. It's really nice to see. And, although you had a bit of plot going, now there is a concrete problem/adventure! Yay! Keep up the good work.

I loved how the retainer showed more emotion in the chapter

The retainer said, “Very well. I will accompany you, though… I may become a touch… maudlin. The singing always gets to me"

But anyway, the maid lady was so eerie. You did an awesome job on her. At the beginning you almost think she's nice, but then you sense that something is wrong, and she attacks! Once again, I really enjoy reading this. Your characters are wonderfully illustrated.

Why do you leave us at a cliffhanger? Gr... But great story!

Susan

No! Maleran! What happens next! I'm waiting on the edge for an update!

When I read action stories like this one I review every chapter to let you know my reaction as I go along. When I was writing "Road" I relied on chapter-by-chapter reviewers to let me know how I was doing. Plus, this story really rocks! The suspense is spot-on.

Let the "games" begin! Lunaria needs to be neutralized! But I'm kind of worried about Caitlin's role as Veyn's successor.

Thanks for looking into my work. LOL! I know I've been mostly yaoi lately. My "Rio" series doesn't focus on yaoi. In fact, "The Road Less Traveled", while mentioning a mXm relationship, doesn't contain any real mXm sexual material. The story focuses on Rio Angele, a female underground fight club warrior who gets involved with a bunch of "normals" then has to find a way to stop her boss from killing them. There are 2 prequels to the story (one of which I'm still slowly working on) that do contain some mXm activity, but all of the stories are focused on her. There's also a sequel that doesn't have any mXm scenes.

If you would like to look at "Road" sometime, I'd be curious to know what you think of Rio.

Oh my God! Marcus is such a man-ho! LOL!

this was an interesting twist but i feel like from chapter to chapter things jump abruptly. it could just be me. some of ur normal wonderful details waned a bit in this, like u said the "Dragon walked away" that doesnt sound quite right. but, to make up for it, the dialogue was written better

~Mack