How strange. the end is a slight twist, foreshadowed by that little bit in the beginning...and then you look back from the vantage point of the end of the story and see that yes, it all could be a metaphor. if anything, i think the first fight paragraph could be a little more descriptive, a little more...there. for lack of a better word. wow...what a strange concept. i love strange concepts. yay!

Nice, I like the symbolism. Very interesting. Short but concise. excelent job.

A little gruesome but not nearly as bad as some other people's I've read. but, anywho, actually, the description was really good here(though gruesome as it may be) haha, I really can't understand why I'm making such a big deal about it anyway, but, ahem, so, good job on this and keep writing! (don't mind me, I'm insane. Even I can't understand me half the time)

Rock on, peace out, and Keep writing,~Davida

Wow! Great story! That was probably the best one shot I have read! I really liked how you described the war as between two animals. It was a great aligory! The only thing I can say to help is in the first Paragraph you started alot of the sentences off with The. It makes the story kinda stale sometimes. Other than that supperb story! I really liked it! It is going on my favorite stoy list! :)

Oh wow! That was really cool! Its so clever how you had the animals n the men fighting n how it all intertwined! It was really well done! i LOVED it! Great work! Really liked it! _

This story was pretty cool. I liked how you used animals fighting to represtent the armys fighting. Cool story! _