yay hold on...youdontknowmyname said nice update but ok she said absolutely beautiful BUT shes gotta go to work so its my turn _ I LOVE YOU LANCE../TALON!rofl _ second day of school today its flipping ausome _ i just figured out how to spell that correctly but whatever! hehe i got pokafied in gym -_- this kid kept calling me "hey girl" rofl he was like...you like barbie? you gotta barbie backpack. well no duhh. and anyway _ it was to hot to pas up rofl sorry need to go see some chat folkies even if the room might be full of newbs right now and even if hes totally avoiding/ignoring lance _ i like that one best _ i still love anthony too

Dammit. Stop making me cry. I don't like crying... but maybe, if it's for Talon here, I might make an exception.

-sniff-

-Sugar

oh, wow. just ... wow. this story is so absolutely amazing. i am absolutely addicted, and please update soon because this is outstanding. beautifully written, interesting, and a great read. the chapter where lance turned out to be talon caught me completely by surprise - i never would have expected that. this is just a great story, and i love it. please, please update soon. by the way, will talon and anthony ever get together? because i would absolutely die of happiness. that would be awesome. _

Poor Talon... ;o; Ah, its very angsty, this chapter. I wonder, will Anthony still have an urge to write Talon a letter that he won't send. I'm so curious how he is acting at the moment. And he admitted he likes Anthony! Ehh, really sad. don't kill yourself Talon I look forward to the next chapter? Is it the last? o_o Aw. I really enjoyed this story... _; Anyways, see ya.

Personally I like the way this story is written. It's really creative and easy to read. I'm glad you're not going to put it in third person.

This was another WONDERFUL chapter!

Can't wait for more!

I feel so sorry for Talon. . I wanna what Anthony will do! Please update soon!

As for the third person perspective...it might not be a bad idea I think..maybe you can do it in the last 2 or 1 chapter? Or are they just gonna keep writing and not meet up? o_o Oh, well, it's up to you!

Omfg. His, as in Talon's, thoughts are painfully suicidal.

Especially the last line.

"The world’s still turning, but Anthony still hates me, so what’s the point?"

Ohh boy. -crosses fingers and hopes it will end up okay-

You have to be one of the fastest updaters ever. That's awesome! I love this story. The sooner there's a new chapter, the happier I am. .

Aw, poor angsty Talon. Hope Anthony comes around and finally talks to him again, so things can be straigtened out. I feel bad for both of them...

Oh the angst, the angst! What a perfect start to a dreary and soon to be stormy morning, don't ya think? XP

But anyway, amazing chapter as always! And to be honest I'm glad you aren't going to change it, to third-person perspective that is, it's much better this way. Especially when it comes to the insight of the characters, and exactly what they're feeling.

Uh oh. You got me worrying for Talon here, and I don't want to be worrying, especially to where the thoughts of my worrying are leading me...

Please don't let Talon kill himself! ((falls down on knees and starts to beg)) Oh please, please, PLEASE. I mean a little angst never killed anyone, I mean..w00t angst, I like it sometimes. But I hate suicidal tendencies ANGST. And where Talon's journal writing seems to be heading, isn't helping out in easing my worries...X_x;

((huggles Talon)) Don't worry! Anthony will come around soon enough, the fates are at work here, they'll get you guys back together...I hope. ((nudges RedheadedPheonix))

Oh but it's okay, it's your story, and the way it's going, I'm still lurving it, so keep it up! This includes all suicidal tendencies and what not. ((shudders))

Oh and now onto constructive criticism mode ((POOF!)) ((switches to constructive criticism mode)) From what I could see, there's nothing here that I'd worry about, besides the obvious of course ((coughANGSTcough))Ahem! Grammatically things seem well, as does punctuations and all that fun stuff!

I think that's enough for now, and the fact you're nearing the end...

Status: Impatiently Waiting...even MORE now X3

hey! what an angsty chapter... poor talon! poor anthony! it's almost over? no... i love this story..AND the format. i'm glad you're not going to change it. todays my first day of school ;-; when are talon and anthony going to talk? they ARE going to talk, aren't they?

Very good, I've found I like this story alot, can't wait for more. laterz

Poor Lance/Talon.

Even though it pretty much was his fault I hope Anthony forgives him soon. He's just so adorable and I feel really bad for him.

Actually I feel really bad for Anthony too.

I bet the whole thing made him feel like crap.

Anyway I love this story. I'll be looking forward to the next chapter!

UPDATE SOON!

Ooh, things are getting extremely bad between them, aren't they? Though, it IS kind of Lance's (or rather TALON) fault, if you really think about it. Oh, well

Awh, poor Talon, the sweetheart. Please let them make kiss and make up?

Awesome chapter, as usual.

~_

Loving the fast updates.

Good chapter, can't wait for more!