|Reviews for Laying On the Line|
| Spiral Artist chapter 4 . 10/2/2005
A vision of a binge, yet so pastoral it can also be a sunset at a crystallite lake.
| Elizabeth Ebony chapter 4 . 10/1/2005
5-7-5 (haiku syllable count)
delicious haiku,so colourfull in such few words.
| Elizabeth Ebony chapter 3 . 10/1/2005
Haunting,soft and hackingly awe,once again.
| Elizabeth Ebony chapter 2 . 10/1/2005
Maybe you can help me fly.I love that so innocent...would have sounded even more so if you had put a question mrk on the end,just my opinion,but gorgeous haiku.
| Elizabeth Ebony chapter 1 . 10/1/2005
| Spiral Artist chapter 3 . 8/3/2005
Somehow I find this to be connected to the "Messenger Bag" poems... Still as enchanting.
| HopelesslyHopeful chapter 3 . 8/3/2005
I really like this. Especially the beginning line. _
| Spiral Artist chapter 2 . 8/1/2005
Actually, they are not, technically, haikus; the syllable count goes as 5-7-5. But the content, well... lets say you are almost a natural at haikus... (note: Didn't want to be offensive in that, just that the syllable count does matter quite a bit...)
| Spiral Artist chapter 1 . 8/1/2005
Content lacks the cliché of haikus, however, in that, the metaphor of softball works to its marvel.
| flaming.footprints chapter 2 . 8/1/2005
Wow, powerful, and sensual. Keep it up