Reviews for Monochrome Outlook
One-Hand Clap chapter 1 . 4/19/2008
I'm wondering if it'd read better:

You cannot go on

At all, my love

Because as it reads now:

You cannot go on

At all

My love

It looks somewhat awkward, only because of my formatting tic deep inside of me, because 'my love' has more letters and therefore juts out from 'at all', if you know what I mean? Do you? It'd be a wonder if you did!

Apart from that, a charming poem! I loved the twist in the end. 'And you're so Colourless!' haha! It made me laugh!

- Clap Trap, from Review Marathon [link in profile]
Nobody-n-Particular chapter 1 . 8/3/2005
Very nice use of color.