|Reviews for Safe|
| lookingwest chapter 1 . 12/20/2009
Wow, I like the kind of bitter sarcasm with this piece again, you work well with it, I like it because it gives the poem an overall tone that kind of makes me sit and reflect-I mean, I read this twice, once with the parenthetical words and once without, so that I kind of took it out of that sarcasm for a moment, I think it comes across either way, but the last stanza is especially mocking towards that ideal. I like how you take the theme of a "perfect ending" and you blatantly expose it for what it is because that just needs to happen more often-also, I found the situation of your speaker relatable and very realistic.
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| Lilja Ruusu chapter 1 . 1/19/2009
just another (heartbreak) perfect ending
to her (never) perfect fairytale.
I loved that part! I liked the contradictions throughout the poem! It made it more interesting than if you had simply said "just another perfect ending to her perfect fairytale." Good work!
| blue-dan chapter 1 . 7/21/2008
Again, loving the parenthesis use, I imagine those words as whispers, a kind of afterthought.
| lymli chapter 1 . 6/3/2008
for some reason, it reminds of some girls who can't do anything without a man even if such a man doesn't deserve anything.
| NJ Is My Home chapter 1 . 1/17/2008
hey thanks for reviewing my poems, i thought i'd check out ur stuff but you have soo much !..i didn't kno which one to read first..i like this poem especially the lines about how the man was the girl's legs and shes paralyzed without him..real nice
| Aomera chapter 1 . 1/14/2008
great ideas and i love the itallics and the (black) / (white) bit, really works. not so sure about some of the other brackets but cool, as ever! Ax
| Dreaming Chica chapter 1 . 1/10/2008
Love not only the style and flow of this poem but the emotion you put into it, amazing.
I love the words parantheses! What an original idea, that adds so much to the poem!
| Amalia Jagd chapter 1 . 5/16/2006
i like how you put the little words that really make the poem in parantheses. this is a good work.
| Broken Petals chapter 1 . 3/27/2006
Thanks for reviewing my stuff. I really like this piece. Tis well done.
| estrela chapter 1 . 3/19/2006
m the parenthesis really emphasize points... i like them a lot. wonderful poem; really sad though.
| angelicdust chapter 1 . 1/25/2006
there's one word i hae have for this.."brilliant"...how can u read my thoughts? i just know this feelin to well ...luvd da way u used da parathesis dat express so much in so little...-shail
| catseyeview chapter 1 . 10/8/2005
Can't is my favorite...I liked esp. the middle stanzas about you not being able to reach the moon on your own
| Unready chapter 1 . 9/18/2005
I kept expecting this to rhyme, a good thing. good poem.
| Indigo-Andie chapter 1 . 8/27/2005
i like how you've made her pyhsically impaired without him to show how she emotionally feels - that's awesome.
| beti213 chapter 1 . 8/22/2005
heart-breaking. you should like this; it's superb. amazing mix of past euphoria and the present lense of bitterness layered over... well done.