Reviews for The Pain Took Over
smile persephone chapter 1 . 9/6/2005
The only thing that is remotely original is "I write the story on my wrist". When I read that, I thought about someone literally writing about their problems. Seems a little less cliche than what the poem is actually about. I was rather disappointed when this turned out to be a suicidal-sob-story poem.
Anna178 chapter 1 . 8/6/2005
Somehow this poem doesn't really seem to finish the story. It's not like its realyl short, it just seems to end too quick, ya know? Anyway, still good, as is all your work.

ANNA
Chell-o Bodello chapter 1 . 8/5/2005
So true. Why end your life because of someone you "love?" It makes no sense!

Nice description. Great first point perspective. I like the line, "So I write the story on my wrist." I'm weird, I know, but I really liked that line for some odd reason.

Lunchi