Genius. You are an absolute genius and I hope the world can see your work all published and worshipped. I must admit that the 61 chapters were a bit daunting in numbers, but I flew through them surprisingly fast. I enjoyed Lucky's humor and the story's general irony. Portraying a male mind as you did is also quite a feat.
I think my favorite part of this story was the com

Yippee! I actually envisioned Lucky and Tiffany to be Asian, at least with dark hair and dark eyes. I imagined Cricket with dark straight hair, and most Asians have black hair. I actually thought that Tomo looked like Tami in Another Cinderella Story, though. (I am Asian, so I do know that we, in general, do better with academics but people like Lucky don't. Ther are actually a few dumb Asians out there.)

I would definitely buy this story for $2.99. I read this story in approximately three nights, give or take a few. Lucky's story is enthralling and captivating, and I look forward to rereading this over and over again :3.

-brisingr

YOU ARE SO FUNNY! (Just started reading your story a few days ago, thought I'd finally click that review button...) You have a gift for genuine writing (which is what I think you're going for, so congratulations!) And your characters are all a total success, I love them... Lucky comes off as real, with enough normalcy except also enough drama and fun to make me keep reading. And YES LET'S GET MORE LINX PLEASE! Hm, how else to praise you... well, I've only recently discovered fictionpress (yes, I'm a newbie, but give me some credit, I've been a fanfic addict for ages) but now I'm hooked here too, creds to you ;) THANKS FOR MAKING ME LAUGH K BYE ;)

I know someone who got hit by a car. They survived because they only got hit by the wing mirror

A bit of a disappointment. I had liked Cricket's and Lucky's buddy-buddy relationship. But whatever, the story was alright.

Okay, let me just start off with this: this is one of the best stories I have ever read. You've set the bar to a whole new level, and I'm not sure if I'll ever find a story this entertaining. I loved every single thing about this story.

When I found out you were a girl, I was really shocked, because you were able to portray a guy's perspective REALLY well (I'm a guy, by the way, so I do know what it's like).

The characters were really well-developed. This was the first time I really felt a connection with the characters in the story (especially Lucky, he really grew on me). I got angry when Tomo pretended to be pregnant and humiliated Lucky. I was depressed when Lucky was rejected by Cricket. I was even in a happy mood when Lucky got Cricket to say yes to a date (which you then proceeded to crush by revealing it as a joke, but it was still entertaining).

Even though it was a bit random (although I can't say I didn't enjoy the randomness), the whole story had a sense of continuity to it, and everything just flows. It was also wonderfully entertaining, and there was not one chapter where I didn't find myself either cracking up (the amount of WTF is extremely funny), or extremely intrigued and interested in the story.

I also really liked your use of lists in the story (e.g. Why Lucky is awesome), and they were really entertaining.

The ending was perfect, (the narration was good enough to be in a movie!). It was a very good close to the story, and it was very Lucky-like.

I thank you, for entertaining me for a whole week (while I read the story). You have touched me in a way I didn't know possible, and I'm really sad to have reached the end of the story. You should definitely try to get it published! It's even topped some published books that I have read. I would totally buy it! Not just for $2.99, but for waaaaaaaay more! This is even good enough to be made into a movie!

I sincerely hope you will (one day), be able to publish this story (and maybe even get it made into a movie), and perhaps make a sequel to this. I think it's great, and I wish you all the best in your pursuit of publishing this story.

this story is entertaining... I've spent the last hour reading it lol...

That was Awesome! At first I wasn't sure what was going on but that's the most amusing and creative previous chapter summary ever! It beats the compact paragraph that most authors use.

Dudette! I love this chapter. I especially love the scene where Lucky was piecing together what Cricket and Simon may have. The funniest scene was the prey and predator moment. All the characters that participated in this did absolutely well, especially Lucky, who just ended the chapter with a blatant 'no' to Wendy's unfinished question.

I love your writing. You make me laugh in every chapter and I LOVE to laugh. Great job! I truly admire your writing. More news for you...you have my name, but mine is spelt Lainey. Tootles _

This story makes me crack up and split my insides laughing
so good job!
:D

Heh heh. Sorry. My last review was cut off.

Anyways, I'll continue what I was saying.

... You don't even know what an impact your creation has made on my life. I myself am pretty self conscious and very quiet, and quite frankly I love and admire Lucky's attitude. He's so at peace with himself. Ever since I've started to read this, I have become more assertive. In a good way though. I've been more talkative and spewing a lot more profanitiies. Oops. ;) I've even taken up some sayings that Lucky has said by accident. It just kinda slips out :) I really love this story. Your characterizations are amazing. I honestly feel like I know each and every one of them. I seriously wish these were real people. I'd totally date Darwin. (I'm a girl, by the way.)

I love this story so fucking much. Lucky's sense of humor and the amount of crap that he has to go through on a daily basis is hilarious. I wish I could write this well. Honestly, this is the best story that I've ever read. Ever. I'm not even kidding you. I'd totally buy it if you published it. It was too funny :) good job with the characters. They were extremely realistic and deep.

-Bobby Corwen

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I don't even know what to say. Words cannot describe the awesomeness that this story is. I guess I'll just start with this: Holy crap. That was fucking hilarious!

Seriously, though. I love this story and I don't even know how to describe what an im

i love your story... there's just one glitch in this chapter
he says that he's a "one man woman"
was that on purpose or did you mean "one woman man"
anyways i died laughing so yeah :P

Ha-ha..shitty cat!

But the passage about girls and their revenges.. it's right.

We never forget! :D

Mira