Reviews for More Than Meets The Eye |
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![]() ![]() ![]() wow... posted in 2005 and here it is 2018 , 13 yrs later and still no update. As i said in one of my earlier posts it's a good start and storyline. However , if you do ...do a rewrite may i suggest you make her younger sister just a little older say she's 14 (freshman) ... with maybe some type of jealousy streak going on between the sisters..i think keep her younger sister with the same (geeky side)to her personality . Have Jon in mental break down (lol) between the two. judt possible suggestions if you ever decide to continue. If not ...i'd like to try my hand at the story to complete it with some interaction from you if possible. |
![]() ![]() ![]() ok cliff hanger here which you have to solve soon because i'm hooked on the story so dig out that old laptop start pounding on those keys and get something out to us. more of max's POV about what she's wearing (which i'm assuming is a very skimpy bikini) |
![]() ![]() ![]() please update ! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey, I love, love, love your story! Ya think you could post character pics on your profile? I'm having a hard time picturing Bridget. Keep up the good work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'VE READ ALL OF IT ,VERY GOOD WAITING BREATLESSLY FOR MORE. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw why the cliff-hanger? well please post up the next chapter before us readers die of suspense...lml |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh my, I love that cliff hanger there. Let's try not to leave it that way for long shall we? I like Max's POV, but mostly because it shows his emotions and proves his softer side. I like the idea of him sharing his thoughts of Bridget and I hope to see more of that. Keep it up! |
![]() ![]() ![]() So I am following the story, which is pretty cool and very creative because I haven't seen any stories written from this point of view. I really like the change in Mark, makes him look hotter! (lml) So if you could update as soon as possible that would be cool, so I don't forget and be forced to read the whole thing over. thanks |
![]() ![]() ![]() Umm, I can DEFINITELY say I've never seen so many curse words in one chapter. But I really like the story, please continue! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() seems interesting so far i'm looking forward to seeing what happens |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey, I am still following this just so you know. I'm so glad to see another chapter I was really starting to wonder if you forgot about it. I hope you keep on with this, I find it wonderful. I love when she's in her head saying "Fuck you, I want the fish, but no." Lol that killed me a little because of how I pictured it. Oh the nerd is challenging her, I'm intrigued. Well, I hope to see more soon! |
![]() ![]() nice story, cant wait 2 c how it ends |
![]() ![]() ![]() Brilliant story so far. Please update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great story and great chapter too. I am interested in how she falls in love with him, well done! |
![]() ![]() ![]() So far, I like this story. As your summary said, it's a nice change from geek girl with popular guy. I seriously want to punch your narrator, though. Hopefully, the readers are supposed to hate her right now. She's everything that I hate in a real person as of now. Grammar skills are good, and good variety in sentences, but a bit on the short side. Good, though. Keep writing. |