Reviews for Playing in Traffic
none of burt's beeswax chapter 1 . 10/31/2008
the line breaks seem sudden and awkward, and they fit perfectly with the poem. i really love the line "you are a lesson in negative space."
Tikklz chapter 1 . 10/27/2005
for some reason, I actually didn't like the last line...but the rest is unbelievably usual.
lackluster chapter 1 . 8/17/2005
'this is not a love poem' it reads like perfection. amazing.
Nobody-n-Particular chapter 1 . 8/12/2005
Ah, the bluntness, awkwardness expressed in your words conveys that uncertainty within very effectively. That last line was priceless.
Fuinixe chapter 1 . 8/11/2005
Ouch. This poem radiates pain. I love how you separated the lines and stanzas; the emphasis is perfect.

If it hurts this much to read it, I can't imagine your agony. It is yours, yeah?

I like all the metaphors: traffic, boxes, art.

I like the suddenness of the beginning. It throws the reader straight in and you just fall through the branches snapping them in half.

Yeah, that. That's what this poem feels like.

x Sabbrielle