This piece is truly well written, and the ending really was a shocker! Kudos!

This is my first review here on fictionpress. I wish I could provide more constructive crit for you, but I dont think you'd need it. The characterisations were constant and excellent and it was well written and well spelt. What else can I say?

Good story. I love how it's written and how you interpreted "God" as the fairy. I really enjoyed this. Onto my brand new, shiny faves list it goes. :D

Oh, this is wonderful. I love this!

I found no grammar errors ( My day is uncomplete without them! ::laughs:: Anyway, I loved how it was so erious and grim, all /morbid'like/ and then BOOM! God is an orange fairy. It's irony wrapped in a ball and delivered to your doorstep :D it made me laugh for a while, after I read this. It's a good read, and definetly going on my favorites list.

Ciao, muchachos!

Sorry it took me so long to get back. I'm starting colege soon, so I get sidetracked a lot.

I had my reservations when I went to read the piece, but it actually came out pretty interesting. A fairy as God, and all else as a human imagination? The idea is pretty unique. All in all, I liked it. Hope to see more from you soon!

This was so intriguing! I don't think I've ever read something like this on fictionpress before, so to me it was pretty original. _ I really liked how God was a fairy; it was hilarious! Sorry, but I'm not going to be a good reviewer and give you constructive criticism, I mean, I didn't pick up any grammar/spelling mistakes (as is often the case with me), I just thought that the story was awesome. ;) Now that I think about it some parts reminded me of Hitch Hiker's Guide to the galaxy.

Awesome! I love it! Will it be longer, though?

This story was very interesting, to say the least. First two questions;

About the map; if the map indeed started at the place of Mao'Khim's birth, a mountain, shouldn't the first symbol be a triangle?

I'm confused about the giant door as well. I understood it was PUSHED open, yet the next chamber was much smaller. Illusion? The actual door was only very small, and the rest was only for intimidation? (painted or something?)

Further, I -adored- this story; the details were great and for a change I find a well-written story with little dialoge. I like this God; "I was actually thinking of remaking the world now." Only a God can say something like that _

Yikes, just as it was about to appear amusing near the end, it ended up as just plain creepy. (shudders) Nice job, by the way! Keep on writing!

Interesting. You are good at description and i like how you leave the reader in the dark by not giving reasons to explain exactly why Aramand kills himself, although i think you could have expanded on the philosophy theme. all in all, good stuff. -The Lady Elaine