Reviews for The Course of Eight Years
Reomablue chapter 5 . 5/21/2007
I am still reading your stories which means I really enjoyed this plot of yours. Please continue.

There are some typo but again very few. Great chapter as always.
Reomablue chapter 3 . 5/21/2007
Great chapter as always...and I am a slow reader as always.

Keep it coming!
Reomablue chapter 2 . 5/20/2007
Enjoyed this next chapter as well. Pardon me for being a slow reader. You know works and some stuff came in my way, but believe me when I say I enjoyed reading your story and fully understand each part. Well written I must add.

Thanks and continue writing as I would want to see the end of this story of yours.
Barbados chapter 12 . 5/9/2007
I'm so excited to see a new chapter of this that I'm completely useless as a reviewer right now lol. I can say that I do very much enjoy how you worked out the 'buying silence' situation. Also, the depth of everything that is going on is really starting to show through in this chapter, and that was great. Hope to see more from you soon (don't keep your fingers cross for anything from me.)
Reomablue chapter 1 . 5/8/2007
I really enjoyed reading your story though it was a bit short, but I think you did a very good job in describing some details that while I am reading I am able to visualize the drama in my mind. You can guarantee that I will be reading more of your stuff so write more.
beggars-would-ride chapter 11 . 2/19/2007
O! I'm definately excited to read on!

I would appreciate, in the coming chapters, a little bit more delving into the psyche of all your characters, especially Fred. The bad guy always has to have a strong motive. I am sure you will not let me down: I have seen how well you have your characters figured out! You're wonderful.

If it would not interrupt the flow too much, I would also appreciate a bit more description of the setting.

Just a little note, in the last two paragraphs Tristan seems to be sitting and standing simultaneously. :)

I also have a question: could you email me with specifics on these characters' appearances? I would like to draw them, if I may. :)
beggars-would-ride chapter 1 . 2/8/2007
So...hey! I joined here!

I am really enjoying this story so far! The characters are very endearing. My favorite aspect of it is that Ed is the youngest prince, and that the two older twin princes are rotten.

As far as constructive crit...I naturally focus on vocabulary at the same time as creativity, and something that bothered me slightly was their speech: at times it was more eloquent than the narrative and at other times much less...I couldn't pick which was real.

I'll continue reading, I just wanted to leave you a quick note!
Barbados chapter 11 . 1/19/2007
I was so confused at first... I was like... Mikulas... isn't he dead? Anyway... the only thing I didn't agree with was using

'and open and honest.' I'd change it to and 'open, honest' or even eliminate open completely. Aside from that, it was great. Short yes, to the point I wanted to reach through the internet and bludgeon you with something, but I'm sure I'll be ok. Something is better than nothing, as you said. Does html work in these things?... if I did would I get my frickin paragraphs? Only trying will tell... I digress.

So it's a whole new thing now. A new son, and a new spin. Tristan seems only too happy to hear the news, which makes me wonder about him... he's part of an uprising, after all, we're just not sure what he's raising up about. Jerome takes the news badly... he must have been close to his father. I wonder if he was close to Ed. Thanks for the update, hear from you soon I hope. ~Barbados
phantom-jedi chapter 11 . 1/18/2007
Good chapter! It's nice to see your work up here again. I take it Jerome will be leaving for a while to sort things out. I hope things go well in his absence.

The Gobbler chapter 1 . 8/8/2006
"With a mock bow and self-satisfied smirk, Rowland swiftly ducked out of his brother's room, just in time to hear to the dull thunk of Ed's pillow hitting the door."

My favorite line, though a bunch of them during that exchange between Edwin and Rowland came close. This is a great start, I I loved the beginning-not only after you start telling Edwin's story but during the prologue-ish thing as well. I enjoyed the narrative about the kings.

Hm...I like the characters so far. I have a feeling Rowland's going to be my favorite, if he continues to be a main character. I've always liked pranksters. I think the biggest thing that strikes me about Edwin is how young he is. I'll be interested to know how that affects whatever comes later, if it does at all. Um... I think that's about it.

Thanks for the review, btw!
Barbados chapter 10 . 1/10/2006
The first part of the chapter seemed to come too quickly. I would have liked to see a bigger buildup to the point where Fred decides on that course of action. I do like Garrick's reaction though. Very exciting there. With part two, I'm eager to see if Bryce's master is who I think, which would explain your little AN. If so, that would be an excellent touch, I think. I'll e-mail you about it, I don't want to spoil it for the readers. Also, I think your writing overall is improving. The dialogue was good, and the descriptors were also well done, for example: Bryce rose in a sudden, fluid motion. I had another example in my last review. Keep up the good work!
Lccorp2 chapter 10 . 1/9/2006

Archdemon Lord Duffikus:

Nope, no confusion there.

Just to let you know.
Barbados chapter 9 . 12/27/2005
O, intrigue! Yay! Don't worry about late chapters, this review is almost a whole month late :( I'm just glad you're still writing this, becuase I'm really enjoying it. My 2 bits of CC would be A) why Fred felt inclined to pay off Willow. Seems more likely he would use intimidation, or information from his 'plants' to sort of blackmail her, at least for Fred's character. B) is positive CC :) I liked the line: Fred's voice was calm and dangerous, a stark contrast to Rowe's passionate outburst. Keep up the good work.
temblance chapter 9 . 12/5/2005
Hey again! great chapter! It was really interesting. I didn't spot anything wrong with the grammar and spelling, so I decided to be a little picky:

"He is the most trusted, loyal servant in this palace" I didn't think that this sentence sounded very natural becuase it was dialogue and most people wouldn't say "trusted, loyal". I think that one of the adjectives would get the point across. (feel free to ignore my opinion about this if you want)

But that's pretty much it for cc!

As for the issue with the king (volaton is a pretty cool name, and creative too, by the way), the first thing that came to my mind was that the king was taking it becuase he wanted to, not becuase someone was trying to poison him.'s possible I guess... I like thinking out of the ordinary, and since they obviously expect a poisioning it would be amazing if they discovered that thier father was addicted to some plant or something...

kinda weird, but oh well.

Great job on the chapter- interested in seeing what they do to Ed.
rrmehta364 chapter 9 . 12/3/2005
i didnt catch any typos. also, i think any prince, no matter how trusting, would keep some spies. it is always important to know who is thinking what and i doubt Rowe would be that naive. Also, it seems more likely that Fred and Garrick are behind it all since they were expecting to be next in it be reasonable for them to kill him. remember, Edwin was not expecting the coronation, so Fred and Garrick are making themselves look guilty. Rowe would figure that all out on his own so framing Edwin seems like a very unwise move. Anyways, awesome chapter and look forward to reading more.
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