|Reviews for The Belt|
| The Legendary Eccentric chapter 1 . 8/14/2005
That's an excellent poem, perhaps you could edit your punctuation a bit, if you're going to write in free-verse, you still have to put in all the appropriate punctuation, probably a bit more. Here's an example:
The mother is in denial (Comma here)
She's been making him lie for quite a while (Period)
Minor point, fix up the html if you wanna underline the title. Otherwise, great poem.
| lookingwest chapter 1 . 8/14/2005
wow, this was very, very powerful, i wasn't expecting more because of it being another cliche suicide thing, but instead of you writing about YOURSELF wanting to commit suicide, which alot of poets do, you did it in this point of view, which, from your summary suggests it could be a true story. this holds alot of power, well done.