Nice style here. Somehow it's really apt - the descriptions convey vivid imagery despite being so short!

Update some new piece of work soon! You're doing great :)

Nice poem. It was easy to understand without being too simplistic, and that's always nice. Poetry has a tendency to confuse me sometimes... lol I think that everyone feels like the person in your poem sometimes, and it's always cool to relate to what you're reading. Great job. Keep posting, I'm always looking for new stuff from you. :o)

I like how you put a closure to the poem. It didn't seem like it was ending beacuse of all the "-ings", but you managed to do it. ) I like it. )

This was a really cool poem; just improve on grammar and punctuation.