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This story starts with war, the despair of a family, and the promise of finding more. Grimm's plot is not only well-planned, but it's interesting and fresh. It captivates you, and sucks you into the story until there's nothing more you can do except read and press next chapter when that time comes.

The main characters are running from Bonaparte's men, because they do not wish to fight, much less on something they believe in not. There's an incredible depth to each of the characters right from the beginning as the author portrays the mother, the sensitive sister, and the guileless officer in a way that makes them almost tangible. The Grimm brothers are amiable, and very different from one another. The ethereal dreamy one, and the feet on the ground one.

The writing flows, and the technicalities are good. The plot, the characters, and more than anything the details and the mystery of the town , and the always in the air question of what will happen with the Grimm Brothers is what makes the reader be absorbed right into it. :] The descriptions are detailed and realistic - they don't make things prettier, but more show them as it is.

The only real bad thing I found on this story... are the lack of updates AND the HUGE cliffhanger it's left off in. I literately went "NO" when I realized there was nothing more to read.

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My name is MaGa and I work as a reviewer for a website that features good "undiscovered" FP stories. Your story was assigned to me (and others) and I thought you might like to read some of youre review.

It's been a long time since you've updated, but you're story has amazing potential. I loved reading it. :] Hope that despite it not being published here any more, you're still working on your writing.

~MaGa.

All right, I just found this story and it's really awesome. It is so much better then 2005; "The Brothers Grimm". My only 'criticism' is that you haven't updated in so long. I understand real life coming first though and writer's block. I just hope you know you got a new reader. Hope to see something posted up soon by you for another chapter, of this story.

Okay, you have to add on to this! I read the first half a while ago and then came across it again and decided to read more and it's just so good and you leave it at a cliff hanger! Very talented writer, thanks for writing it.

ADELA H

Gah! Amazing! Cliff-hanger-y! The forest! Wilhelm! Klara! The poor professor! Gah!

Okay, yeah. You seriously need to update asap. I liked Jacob's not being insane. But all those poor books! I'm such a bibliophile...

I do play Swedish fiddle. It is very similar to Finnish fiddle music, only in a major key, mostly. Finnish music tends to be in minor keys, which is lovely. Swedish-Finnish music (played by the Swedish minority living in Finland) is also good. Bjarv has their CDs on otherwise the Northside Company at is pretty much the only American recording company dedicated to Nordic music. They have compilation CDs (the Nordic Roots ones) for $5. They pretty much rock.

Da, ya chitaiu i panimaiu pa russki, no ya panimaiu pa cyrillisk "cursive," nye pa "print." Da, ya izuchala pa russki kajhdu deny pacledom god (next year? *mutters* stupid cases...). Mojhet beet ya izuchaio sledushed god, tojhe. Ya nee znaiu, patamushto pacledom god biula moiu pacledom god (? last year was my last year) na universitetet.

Wow, I have not written that much Russian in forever. Yeah, I might audit more classes next year, as I've only had the two 100-level (i.e. first year) classes. Which were everyday, so we learned lots of grammar, but not so much with the speaking. Apparently this is pandemic to learning Russian? Our prof is a native of Belgorod and has only been in the U.S. for 3 years, which is interesting culturally.

But I digress. Update?

Um, kay. It's been over six months now. Where is my update? Does Jacob go into the forest? Why are the Von Rogoffs suddenly evil-ish?

And, most importantly: WHAT HAPPENED TO HILDE?

Also, If this is around 1800 (Napoleon and all that), and Hilde's diary is from 1720 or whenever, are these the same Von Rogoffs? Like, are they some sort of strange immortal people, or do they die and such?

Now, are you going to update or not? This story is too fabulous to let flounder (even though I am guilty of said crime, but my stories are not as fabulous as this one)!

whoa. that was...intense. confusing. very, very confusing. I think I need the cliff's notes for this story. Or Perhaps when the whole tale's been told, I shall have to read it again. Very excellent chapter- I'm constantly in awe of how many elements this story has.

OHMYGOD! Where's Wilhelm? What did they do to him? What's happened to Jacob? WHERE IS PART TWO?

Damn, you are really good at being cliff-hanger-y and full of suspense. I am slightly envious.

Brilliant, as always. This had better get published sometime.

Oh, infighting in the ranks. Why does Jacob forget things so easily? Why doesn't Klara forget? Why doesn't Wilhelm forget? This is a very tantalizing tale. I don't know how you can keep the secrets to yourself! I know YOU know what's going to happen, but maybe a few more hints for the rest of us?

*grin* As always, excellently done.

I really really like this story to be updated faster. I can't wait for the next chapter! PLEASE UPDATE! PLEASE UPDATE!

Okay, this is long, but good! I love the atmosphere... the beauty of the forest, contrasted with increasing creepiness of the environs. I love how the pastor is so much a man of the Enlightenment, who has no idea what's going on around him (he even uses Latin like Pangloss), and I like the appearance of the girl with the green dress, who seems like she's been around for a long, long time. And again, you have the knack at ending the chapter in a way that has the reader begging for more. On to Chapter 10!

o...memory loss. what a plot twist. I'm going to have to read this whole thing through again when you're done, these german names are killing me. But it's still very, very good. Looking forward to the next chapter!

oh, I so want to see this as a book! It's fascinating! I love it so much, I don't know where to begin. You must have taken german in high school. it all seems so real. keep up the great work!

Oh! Intrigue! A cliff-hanger ending! I want more! I'm still quite confused, but I'm supposed to be, aren't I? It's been a while, so I'm glad for the update. My tales, alas, have been neglected for academia. Hopefully someday soon I'll take them up again.

Excellent work!

You've updated! Yes! I haven't read the new chapter yet because I've decided to re-read everything. It's been a long time, so I've forgotten everything.

I think this is one if the best stories on FP. Yeah, and while I can't tell if everything is historically correct, I can recognize some things I learned in history class last year which makes me feel smart.

I hope you update soon. I really thought you gave up on this.