Reviews for Trapped unconscious
King Krod von Bopper chapter 1 . 9/4/2005
I really liked it. And I'm not sure if you will consider this a compliment or not, but I was listening to death metal and your words fit in it perfectly. hahaI loved this poem
to be deleted chapter 1 . 9/1/2005
this piece is very capable of taking the reader on a journey...and even though it is not pretty you are still able to escape the reality of now and see a bit of something else...good job...
Moonjava chapter 1 . 8/30/2005
Very beautiful and heart breaking.
Martin Peterson chapter 1 . 8/25/2005
Superb. Rhyming often spoils a poem, but in this case it works so well it adds to the aesthetic quality. The theme is well presented and thoughtful. I love the line "Must sheer grief be my sole theme?". You capture the emotions beautifully.

Matt
Free-Writer chapter 1 . 8/22/2005
That was pretty awsome! The rhyming scheme worked really well and added to it.
mizu no kokoro chapter 1 . 8/22/2005
Wow, great job lotsa big vocabualry eh? i think there was a typo in the first stanza, it's 'an', not it's 'and' might wanna fix that

keep writing!
KwazyKandyPie chapter 1 . 8/22/2005
wow...wow, wow. the first thing that went through my mind, besides the poem's words, was, "wow." simply amazing. well written, deep, AH, who am i kidding. instant fave. _-kwazykandypie AKA Kelly Ann-