Franziska: An das Waterhouse-Bild hatte ich gar icht gedacht, weil das Gedicht eine konkrete Vision beschreibt, die ich selbst hatte, aber jetzt wo du es erwähnst fallen mir die Ähnlichkeiten (aber auch Unterschiede) zu dem Waterhouse-Bild auf, gerae auch im Titel des Gedichts. Es ist ein eben auch ein archetypisches Motiv...

Sehr schön! Das ist doch bstimmt von dem Waterhouse-Bild angeregt, oder?

Viele liebe Grüße

Franziska

Nach soviel Lob fällt mir nichts Neues ein, ein sehr gelungenes Gedicht. Besonders gut gefällt mir Your promises the shimmering

butterflies of childhood.

beautifully written. i loved the line 'all You whisper is a kiss'- the words go beyond the page. on my faves.

I loved every line of this poem...very well written with good descriptive words. Well done!-Brittany :)

I like this. You have excellent word choice. Although to my taste, some things like "your gift to me/is joy" are a little too happy and optimistic, I like how you entwine those thoughts with the thought of leaving, still managing to keep a positive spin on things. I like the save me from myself at the end. I think that is a sentiment that many of us can relate to.

sehr eindrucksstark, vor allem die Zeilen "I'm dancing in the dawn of every colour"und "You are here, with open arms, to save me from myself" Ich denke die Liebe ist fähig die Traurigkeit in einem Menschen zu ersetzen, wenn auch nicht sofort und vollständig. Das Gedicht kommt zu meinen favorite stories :-)

Wow, that is beautiful! It is also a wonderful reminder of God's enduring and eternal love for us. Well written. God bless and keep writing (I shall try to get back into reviewing). ~Bethy~

wow..this is rilli nice..you're a great writer..)

beautiful

I really like this. The imagery and symbolism is beautiful. Great work.

i liked this, I did not think you wrote poems concerning religion, this inspired me, and for that. thank you. I suggest the use of appositives at the end of certain verses, and use of commas. As if you already do not know, the line, "Your promises the shimmeringbutterflies of childhood.", needs a comma after promises, and maybe a semicolon. That's it from me.

Talk later

This is a beautiful poem, I love it. Definitely one of my favorites, it's written perfectly.

it is amazingly beautiful.i gasped at the end...it is just perfect,all over.i adore the ending,such a subtle is a powerful image that is left in my mind...whoa,thankyou for writing it! a fave :)

Inspirational and soothing.