| Reviews for Would You Care For Another Gum Drop? |
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  sapphireshine89 chapter 1 . 9/9/2006 *shivers* scary poem thankyou for reviewing my story. I'm just doing it a little on the side. I'm doing re-writes of The Demonic Charms Trilogy and The Gatekeepers mostly and some other random things. :P |
 poet tree chapter 1 . 4/30/2006 you can interpret this in so many ways. it could be sexual or even kind of suicidal. i don't know. the commas after every line add to the jolting effect. don't burn your brownies; they don't taste as good that way. and the dresden dolls? i don't think a day goes by without me listening to them. they make me look at the world in a less cynical way than usual. i am going to come back and read the rest of your stuff, but i'm being kicked off the computer now... |
| Sorrowful Dreams chapter 1 . 4/13/2006 very well written once more. It caught my attention and my mind raced with all the things kids do now a days. ~Sorrow~ |
| Moondog Dozier chapter 1 . 1/12/2006 The sounds created in this are amazing. Descriptions as well. Fun read. |
| in theory chapter 1 . 1/4/2006 The comma after every line may make it jumpy, but that gives it a throaty, indefinite texture that's alternative, and in a good way. Normally grammarless poetry confuses me and/or is too vague to leave any impression on me, but this worked its magic instantaneously. |
| Jezsh chapter 1 . 12/24/2005 there are some wonderful lines in this, I love the image of red snow at wartimes...the abrupt change between the first and second parts. Simple and sharp. |
| White Tea and Ginger chapter 1 . 11/28/2005 Love it. You're very talented. I put you on my favorites list. I loved 'tied up in your sleeves of paper'. Gorgeous. |
| CarnelianDesire chapter 1 . 10/15/2005 Ep~ Pretty. I love the rhyming scheme and how you position the words on the page. :) |
| Sally-andersonn chapter 1 . 9/21/2005 Really funky poem. It's so random. |
| citrus scented chapter 1 . 9/13/2005 love the rythum and idea- just awesome, it works wonderfully. very effective piece, i just love the contrast of images and suggestions. and the genius in the stanza: "red rivers of love,making the daisies as red as the,snow during war," twisting images to contrast with themselves. love it, good luck with the block. |
| mizu no kokoro chapter 1 . 9/4/2005 wow, imagery is intriguing~~ graet job! keep writing! |
| Nobody-n-Particular chapter 1 . 9/3/2005 Unique references and sharp diction. |
| bjw chapter 1 . 9/1/2005 Hi! Wonderful imagery in this one!:) I thought "red rivers of love/making the daisies as red as the/snow during war" was particularly good. Didn't really get it though - how does the title relate to the poem? Hm good work anyway! |
| having reached closure chapter 1 . 8/30/2005 Hmm, beautiful. Have i ever read this before? hah, now i know what you were talking about when you said that you wrote something with 'snap, crackle, pop' in it. heh. *hugs* have a wonderful day, -Naomi hearts |
| Moonjava chapter 1 . 8/30/2005 Rather cool. I really like the format. |