These were very nice chapters. I actually read up to the third, but for some reason I kept getting that TCP error message, which wouldn't allow me to review you there.

Anyways, I read up to the third because I wanted to understand more about the character, Tom's significance, and the whole MP3 deal. I was left with a few minor questions about the charcter(s), that could easily be answered if I read the next few chapters. Like Tom, is will she get with him later on or will he become a friend, because when I skimmed through your other chapters I saw he was still around. But basically to sum this review up, I think your description was very nice and you didn't have an over flow of dialogue without detail or input like I've read in several others stories. There is a sort of mysterious air that has you wanting to continue. So...to that, great chapters and good story.

my eyes are bleeding

i wonder if this affects me at all that i am not british whatsoever.

wait, nevermind. i am. but not born on that side of world is what i was trying to say

nevermind

hah, your AN's are almost as long as the story

This was a great chapter. I like how you made the story a big flashback, at least that's what I thought what was happening, it wasn't very clear. We learn a lot about her character this chapter. She's so cold and well, emotionless. How did she get to be this way? Does she have friends besides Mel? She seems to like watching people and observing them, like with Tom in the beginning. Her relationship with her family obviously contributes to it, and how her parents seemed almost fake in their happiness of her grades. I think this story is really interesting!

i am starting to wonder where you came up with all of this

i am starting to see a plot?

i think so.

but then again JK Rowling is a tricky woman

interesting

all i can think is attempted suicide

homigod, i am solost

really gr8 opening chapter!*!*!cleo is exactly like my sister :/

This was a very good start! Um...hm...I like that you're writing it in present tense because I write ALL my stories in past tense and it's cool to read it written this way. okey-dokey then. Now I forget how I came across your story but I think you reviewed someone else's who reviewed me and I always review people who review me so I reviewed her and for the people who reviewed her you were on there so I felt like reading a story so yeah. Oh My God. If I had said that, I'd be passed out from lack of oxygen. It was even hard to type. heh. :) ciao.

What an interesting start to the story. There are lots of mysteries and other things that you hint at. That's awesome, because it keeps the reader wanting to read more. I'm so curious about this now. I want to know who she is, and who Jack is. Was he a musician? Was she in the hospital, because she tried to kill herself? How old is she? So many questions went through my mind. I can't wait until I see them answered. I also thought how you wrote her was interesting. You told her thoughts in a way that let you know a little bit about her, and at the same time added the intrigue of the chapter. Great story.

i cant stop reading

ahh.

i am going insane, what?

i need to read more