Reviews for Cabin Four
yellow dalek chapter 5 . 10/10/2006
COOL. Do continue. i like this story v. much!


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Sakura Taking chapter 5 . 10/6/2006
Interesting. I really like the occasional use of sarcasm. Can't wait for more! Keep writing. )
brokendreams21 chapter 5 . 9/27/2006
Um...interesting sarcasm at the end. Such...short chapters after a long time. Tsktsk. But not as bad as me. *Hangs head in shame* But you'll eventually make up for it by putting some super-duper ending to the story. Keep up the awesome work!
Fireeye Howlsong Rainpelt chapter 4 . 2/1/2006
I like it, but the chapters are awfully short. It's annoying to have one chapter long and then one so short you don't even have to scroll down to see all of it. Catch my drift?

The details could be portrayed a bit better, in my opinion, but I still like it. Your paragraphs could be a bit longer; don't ask how to do that, you really just gain the ability to do that over time. lol. Also, watch your spelling, punctuation. There are punctuation errors here-though they're very common, so don't feel bad-and quite a few typos. I have the same problem with the second.

Overall, I like it. Just try to get into the plot a bit quicker. It tends to keep readers interested; I've done stories where it took too long to get any action and it was a bust.

Keep going!

P.S. Thanks for the review of "Scarred." I appreciate that you took time out of your schedule to voice your opinion on it.
Crymson Tears chapter 1 . 1/31/2006
Well, you reviewed for me, so I'll review for you! It is wonderful so far, so I'm offto read the rest. See ya!
brokendreams21 chapter 4 . 1/31/2006
Interesting. I wonder what is gonna happen next...Another really good chapter...(except I kinda forget the story line...oh yes. Working at some place together...) Keep up the great work!
tdawgcars chapter 3 . 1/29/2006
Well it's been a good story so far...I can't wait for you to finish it! UPDATE SOON PLEASE!

brokendreams21 chapter 3 . 1/25/2006
Ah! It's not finished! I want to know what happens next...( Keey writing and keep up the great work!
brokendreams21 chapter 2 . 1/25/2006
That's so cool. I bet you anything that something is gonna happen there. Just you see. Anyways, it's a good idea. 4 friends getting a job at the same place. Way too much fun. The mom figure is described and depicted quite well. Awesome!
brokendreams21 chapter 1 . 1/25/2006
Yay! Lectures rule. (not) And it's an interesting start! I can't wait to read what happens next!
Abby Sequioa chapter 3 . 9/16/2005
great story-I like the ideas out lined and everything, I exspecially like how you have the broken english when Mr. Suiyama and Karen are speaking
sarah1491 chapter 1 . 9/11/2005
Oh, yeah, sorry about that. I think it messed up while I typed it (because I used chapters) or while I uploaded it. I'll fix it A.S.A.P! Thanks for letting me know. :)
Ayunami Yori chapter 1 . 9/11/2005
Ok, so to be perfectly honest, I read this b/c it had my name in the summary. (My RL name is kaitlyn) But, um...what you have here isn't bad at all, it's just...lacking a lot of things. Like...what's going on? I mean, they're sitting in class talking, just general chat, no big deal, and then, Yori has a rapidfire change of opinion about Catty, you throw in a semirandom line about babysitting and it ends rather abruptly-did part of this not upload correctly or something?
Abby Sequioa chapter 1 . 9/11/2005
good start, please continue, it sounds interesting from your summary