|Reviews for From Pauper to Princess|
| Hell's first Icicle chapter 2 . 9/22/2005
please tell me she'll be happy. it wud be so sad if she found her family and sum1 in her fam. waz a complete ass. well. i noe coz of da summary that they will be, soz. just remembered. 'salrite den. D
| Hell's first Icicle chapter 1 . 9/22/2005
omg. das so sad. i feel relli sorry for her mother. is there nething they can do for her? damn. now im acting like shez a real person. shutting up now...
| arachibutyrophobia chapter 2 . 9/22/2005
oh god i was so set to say how that chapter made me laugh... and then the end... well, the beginning made me laugh. the beggining of the chapter was so nice and peaceful.
now for criticism that hopefully shall halp you: a) the time in the hospital could have been a chappie unto itself. thats a pretty big relevation b) er... hm. update soon? haha.
| Angel Jenna chapter 1 . 9/17/2005
I love this. It's a great idea and I love the whole icecream parlor scene. Good job so far. Update soon!
| arachibutyrophobia chapter 1 . 9/16/2005
"Ashlie Edelen, would you be my girlfriend?" She blushed, nodding shyly. - I blushed.
its a good plot, which is what caught my eye. however, you have a lot of...well, you have dialogue, and i feel like you could just dd more details, like feelings, where they are, small details that anyone would notice. clothing, colors, expressions, body language, to draw the reader deeper.
please update soon.
| Big J chapter 1 . 9/14/2005
I think the story sounds great so far, the only thing I saw was like 2 misspelled words but to me the content of the story is most important which did very well at providing a great opening, leaving questions for the reader to figure out later. I also liked the way you described how everyone felt at certain moments, or what they were thinking for example, the part in the beginning when the mother tries to sooth Ashlie saying "They will honey. Soon. They just need to do their jobs," then I like the way u describe what she's thinking with, she said, as calm as she could without betraying the raging emotions warring within her. "Warring within her" that describes how she's feeling to the point where I'm thinking back to some times when I feel like that, great work here, can't wait to read more!
| Angel chapter 1 . 9/13/2005
hey!i love your story! Shayne? haha that's funny! you know what i mean?
| Josh chapter 1 . 9/13/2005
was a really good first chapter, keep it up, was really good cause i related to some of that stuff in real life, hope you have some more interesting stuff next chapter