Pretty damn good. The rhyming seems natural and it flows well, and the message is awesome. I love the two last lines.

The word choice in this poem was amazing. The phrases were powerful. Each line hit me with graet impact and the hnesty eminating from this masterful piece made me think. it made me think about how true this is and how it affects us everyday. if more people knew the message i think it would help us succeed as a people and not just individuals. I'm not sure if i caught the message just right but i know that this was important and i could understand the magnificent power in it and at leats that counts for something. better to understand a little than to misunderstand a lot.