ugh...creepy...i hope I don't end up finding a boyfriend like that...

I love the emotional imagery of this piece. Twisted mental realities are a fascinating line of topics. I love the repeated use of the title line. Your rhyming scheme was a little bit awkward, at times-don't get me wrong, it seemed well thought-out, but I'm not a fan of rhyming poetry. Sometimes it gets too forced, and then you lose some of the intended I really liked it.

wow... so full of shattering images and vivid emotions~ awesome job!

keep writing!

Ok, Roth, let's see what we have here...

I really like the word prose here so far, yet the rhyming is really choppy in my opinion. Maybe if you broke up the poem into different sections it would read a lot easier.

This line: "As I write your name on the walls of this cell,I wrote it with my own tears and mud," was really cool. I liked it and for a poem this was pretty original. Kudos!

Happy writing!

Tk.T~

OH MY..my...err, wow! this is bloody brilliant. me encanta. wow, took my breath away.

wow...powerful..so full of feeling.. wasn't what I expected when I read more and more of it. I absolutely love it!

Another Masterpiece.

There were some points in the poem around the middle when the flow was slightly disrupted. You can tell when you say it out loud.

The idea, however, is very original and unique. And as usual, the ending was well put together.

You've written many poems, and each time you continually surpass yourself. Keep it up. Well done.