Beautiful words... and great rhymes... sounds like a chant... a prayer... lovely...

I really liked it actually. I thought is was great.

Wow - that certainly is dark, but you shouldn't apologize for it being so. It conveys powerful, powerful feelings.

I can't really think of a way to improve it - it's hard to play around with poems like this too much and lose what you originally had. So I guess just leave it, just as it is

This poem is high in detail and passion. Its okay for the most part, the title threw me off a bit...

Fascinating in its detail, its kind of dark, but I enjoyed it. Keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.