Nice poem! Great imagery, and the rhyme scheme works nicely, but the rhythm is more than a little off for most of the poem.

This poem really starts of great, but it seems like the rhyming is a little forced near the middle. The last two lines are perfect. Overall, it's still a great piece. Keep up the good work!

Hey, thanks for the reviews so many days ago, I'm finally getting around to reviewing you. I had your review alerts flagged in my inbox so I could come back to them, but I lost some time. But anyhow, better late than never?

I found the rhyme to be slightly annoying, just because my writing's more of the prosaic sort, and I always get the feeling that writers limit themselves with their rhymes. The put a word at the end of a sentence and it becomes like a concrete block, forcing the last word of the next sentence into another concrete block until you finally build a building. Damn the building. I'm more for free love and we should all live naked in the verdant meadows. Concrete limits the human soul just as rhyme can limit the human word. But if you like using it, keep doing it, you will probably get much farther with rhyme than I ever will with prose. No one reads prose, or wants to, it doesn't take any skill to write prose (Then again it doesn't take much more to rhyme...)

Ah, lust, my favorite of the seven deadly sins because it is the one that plagues me too much for my own well being. I liked the title, Angel of Lust. I wonder which angel that would be? Azazello (Bah! to all rememberance of spelling), couldn't be Abaddon (aka Apollyon)... Not Lucifer, I think he's more for pride. (funny we should say he/she, angels and demons have no gender, so thus they cannot lust. It completely disproves the book of Enoch, but that's what I'm drawing from because it's fun to play with) I don't know, my knowledge of angels and demons is far from comprehensive. I just know those couple of demons, and in way of angels there are Michael, Gabriel, Raphael, Urial, and some others I don't know. I'm no expert on ancient non-canonical books of the bible, in fact I don't even know why I'm talking about it.

Lust, my favorite thing to play with. (as an idea, though I prefer love as it encompasses so much more). This isn't quite lust though, what I mean is that it is lust, but it's human lust. Thank the heavens for that. Animal lust is just sickening, instead of "Desire and passion to caress a breast and massage a thigh" you would have to say "Desire and passion to screw senseless". Then you get into succubuses and whatnot, I've always wanted to see one, just to see if such a thing could exist.

Fast psychology lesson/refresher/whatnotinsertedcomment:Three parts of the human brain- Ego, SuperEgo, and Id. Perhaps there is a fourth. If the ego is our consciousness, and the superego is our mental policeman, and the id is our animal passions, perhaps there is a fourth, I'll call it the subego. It goes with and underneath the ego and humanizes the blind instinct and 'bad' desires of the id by adding rational and knowlede to the picture. Such as your view of lust here, it's the subego view as opposed to the id view of lust. What that has to do with anything, I don't really know anymore? I forgot where I was going with this?

This girl must really have been beautiful. I would love to have my heart trashed by her.

Send her all my lust(love) and regards,-TMO

Ok...this was very interesting...I thought it was a little repetitive, but maybe that's just because I'm a girl reading something about another hot girl or something...anyway, I admire your originality and thought. Kudos!

Happy writing!

Tk.T~

Great.

This is really well done. It's too bad it couldn't serve its original purpose, cause this is good.

Damn, she must have been hot.