This could be a really good story,but I think chapter six is the best.

The first few chapters are very sparse in detail and have too much could have described the surroundings,the characters,and have better explained why these people were being herded to concentration camps.

I see that you did stick very well to the initial experiences of people during the holocaust and I commend you for that!

Very good. It's a freaky thing to think about. Hopefully nothing as bad as the Holocaust happens again, but it seems that people rarely learn from mistakes past, no matter what we think... keep up the great work!Sundaysilence

Ps: Thanks for the review on my poem!

cool story. the start is funny..heh..sorry if it isn't suppose to be anyways keep it up.