Reviews for Art Without Beauty chapter 1 . 12/3/2005
This was wonderful! I loved the last three lines: "because you were nothing more than a memory". Those lines are powerful, like saying that whatever tormented you was okay now since it doesn't matter. Maybe that's not what the poem was actually about, but that is what I interpreted it as. Very good job! Also, thank you for your review on "Apathy". I was experimenting with that layout since I had seen quite a few authors use it and make the works seem beautiful.
youzi chapter 1 . 9/24/2005
nice work here. I liked the enjambement..the honest tone..the one-word lines that worked. do keep writing D
Faye Coon chapter 1 . 9/23/2005
Amazing, this is the only poem ive read all day with any sort of depth. especially those two lines 'another deer dance forsaking the lamb' I think you could have added a bit more detail, but IO did love it. Would you read any of my works? -FAye
crusoeing chapter 1 . 9/23/2005
That's a really good poem. The first stanza is especially good.