Reviews for The Devil
lucretiabaine chapter 1 . 9/23/2005
The random capitalization was not needed (if FP messed up the format, I understand), and the last line made it cliche. You also mixed up your tenses. This could use revision, but keep trying, start proofreading, and you'll get better.
Faye Coon chapter 1 . 9/23/2005
Could you stop writing all this that must have taken you at most ten minutes? You seem to be mass-manufacturing this crap by the hour, binging and perging predictably in the extra time, wouldnt want your punk skater boyfrioned to be dissapointed and start dating Emily, eh? (emily an random name...)-Faye