Wow...

I was taken aback by this piece. I did not expect it to go this way at all. The twists and turns and horror and then complete relief and joy and again suprise.

I think you get the award for making a girl think harder than she had to in one read hehehe.

It was an excellently written tale. It had the horror story quality to it with the strange turns and murders and deaths and yet at the same time it had such a peaceful wonderful ending that it was almost so out of place that it fit perfectly.

I think this is one of my favorite pieces of yours. It is an excellent write and I think you should keep up the great writing. *smile* bravo to you roth.

Very intriguing. This is very simply written, and simple pieces of good quality are becoming rarer and rarer. This sounds like something one might put in a collection of virtuous short stories. Some may argue as to whether or not a point was very clearly made in this story, but you did very well to keep the reader reading all the way through. Awesome work, especially for your first short story.

Good start although, try not to over use capitalizations, even though the cahracters are shouting or whatnot~ Otherwise, do update soon

keep writing!