Wierd. So wierd.

Hm.. this is very jerky and has no rhythm. The message is pretty clear, but that's about all. You spelled 'raping' wrongly. Try to get into the feel of it: read it aloud and you'll see how it doesn't flow, and then rewrite it.

creepy~~ reflects on the many, um, defective people out there~ kinda sad in a way too... but hey, life and all its cruelness~ good work

keep writing!