Reviews for sunset beats
Protege chapter 1 . 10/5/2005
I see Aleppine's influence here, on words like evenshine and liquid fresh, and on the whole mood and structure - and since I adore her work, that's a compliment. This is the third poem of yours in a row that works very well - you must actually be talented - but in this one, I like two things best: some individual word choices, and the meaning I glean from it. Phrases like "cinnamon crimson" (heart) and "sunset stars, spiralling" are brilliant and *powerful*. Then what I see in this -some poor fool who loves you giddy-desperate but either doesn't see that you don't reciprocate it, or doesn't see that they have a life beyond you... *le sigh*...
sunday night sky chapter 1 . 10/5/2005
gorgeous poem x