|Reviews for God|
| Lakoria chapter 1 . 11/6/2005
I don't tink I've ever heard so much said in three lines. The one word I have for that is "confusion." Somehting I deal with everyday of my life.
LOL Thanks for the reviews, it made my day!
God bless, Lakoria
| Nobody-n-Particular chapter 1 . 10/7/2005
What is your answer?
| green.taffeta chapter 1 . 10/5/2005
ah. an angsty haiku. firstoff-the syllables in the second line. there's six. meaning it's a poem, not a haiku.
second - a haiku is meant to find beauty in the everyday. god seems like too flighty a subject to be considered ordinary.
third - there's no nature image, and haikus require nature images.
overall, good start! keep working at it!