|Reviews for Champagne and Oreos|
| laughter at the funeral chapter 1 . 2/7/2006
wow...that was kinda powerful...i esp. liked the "we dunk our childhood inside the alcohol"...its like saying were wasting our youth...really good job...and thanks for reviewing my works...
| Tr APeze-sWiNGer chapter 1 . 12/30/2005
I think juxtaposing oreos and champagne really make this interesting. Oreos are so conventional, while champagne is almost elegant. Great tone. Nice comparision of the lipstick kiss to territory marking.
| kloun chapter 1 . 11/12/2005
the metaphors are very interesting, the title poetry too is very original.
| White Tea and Ginger chapter 1 . 11/8/2005
I like the contrast of the sweetness and the bitterness, not just with the alcohol and the oreos- there's much more than that. Love it.
| Perilous Escapist chapter 1 . 10/31/2005
A little rough around the edges, but lovely otherwise. Very reflective, almost emotionally impersonal though. I love the imagery and comparisons, those are very well done. All in all, nice work, keep writing.
| starbyrd chapter 1 . 10/27/2005
LOVE THIS. i can totally relate. wow.
| Babi Vinni chapter 1 . 10/23/2005
wow..it's really good, not my style of writing, but I'm surprised how much I really enjoyed it...great job!
| TheQueenOfSpace chapter 1 . 10/19/2005
Wow. That sounded very sexy in the beginning ;-) (especially with he lipstick tatoo). I like the whole champagne and oreo thing. I love Oreos _. It also had some sad emotion to it, but this is still a beautiful poem. Excellent job. Keep writing!
| Fabian Cortez chapter 1 . 10/16/2005
Sad emptiness to these emotions as something is lost, yet clung onto from a distance. Beautifully crafted with divine descriptions as always.
I have a couple of more deeply emotional pieces I'd value your thoughts on. "Vanity" & "Autumn Leaves", See what you think?
Oh and also if you fancy something a little more Macabre "Ever After" & "Happy Halloween" might take your fancy. Regardless your thoughts are always appreciated. F.C
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 10/16/2005
this actually mde me cry... beautiful.. btw did you spell champane wrong on purpose
| S0ulSearching chapter 1 . 10/11/2005
I love it...I really liked the line about holding hands "like we're 500 miles apart", it really clicked. Keep it up.-pammy-x3
| backseats on thursdays chapter 1 . 10/11/2005
Hm... intresting work.
| KwazyKandyPie chapter 1 . 10/11/2005
oh wow, that's so deep! great job, love the parts about the champaign in paper cups, the childhood, and marking your territory. excellent.-kwazykandypie AKA Kelly Ann-
| catseyeview chapter 1 . 10/11/2005
incredible metaphor and strong throughout, the message is sent home...
| Sarah-Brighteyes chapter 1 . 10/10/2005
I think I held my breath as I read this piece. It was beautiful... heartbreaking... almost as though death shook some foundation of love here. Perhaps thats the deepest thing I could think of at this hour.
Beautiful imagery and memories put together. I fell in love with this piece. You have a remarkably unique style, especially for fictionpress. Keep up the fabulous writing. Bravo to you and your piece. It made me smile, sadly, but still smile.