|Reviews for Sky's Edge|
| Arschloch chapter 1 . 1/4/2006
I loved reading this. It has a calming sort of voice to it, and I just really like it a lot.
Thank you for reviewing my story. I really appreciated it, especially after the other person just kind of stabbed me like that, even though I did ask for it.
| Joelle Duran chapter 1 . 1/4/2006
I have a great fondness for fables and especially parables, so this was a real treat for me. The openness of it adds to its enjoyability; you're not pounding at anyone with a hammer here, that's for to say I most enjoyed the idea that if the sky were limited, it would be a roof, and we'd be caged-there's so much to draw from those simple piece is a jewel, thanks so much for posting it!
| Kat-Renee Kittel chapter 1 . 12/5/2005
First, I was wondering how you found me and now I know - From MaxNoteVoltage! I saw her review.
This may be short, but the descriptions and the flow are well thought out. For me, it brings to mind a nightmare I have sometimes-mixed-up dream of not being able to get out into the open sky and my fear of the vastness of a neverending sky of too many choices.
Now I'm more at peace-"...my mind did not struggle against the muddled vastness. My eyes did not feel strained; instead they felt eased, unforced. I began to find peace with the sky."
Bravo for a beautiful tale! -Katie.
| maxnotevoltage chapter 1 . 11/16/2005
Your last paragraph holds so much optimism! I like how you gradually worked through the emotion in this piece. I could relate to the paragraph in which you said, "what weakness on my part prevented me from seeing clearly?" I tend to think that way a lot when I feel myself failing, so I could relate to it well.
Oh, and your imagery - perfect. You have a wonderful style! Never stop writing. (Haha - as if I have to actually say that:-P) You're an artist. - :-)
| Descent of Her Own chapter 1 . 11/9/2005
I agree, I don't like fables that tell you how you should look at the piece you've just read. I love how abstract this is, yet at the same time concrete enough for me to see a very clear picture in my mind. Very beautifly written
| Goddess Aurora chapter 1 . 11/5/2005
I don't feel that this fable is forceful at all. It is something that I can relate to. It's telling us that there are always things in this world that we can't understand. We should just seat down, relax and enjoy ourselves. We shouldn't dwell on stuff that we would never understand.
| Eyetk chapter 1 . 11/4/2005
Very, very nicely done.
Oh, oi, how am I supposed to find CCs for this? Consider this my praise: I love it all.
CCs...bleh. Um...hmm. 'unforced'...it's funny that the definition of the word sounds so contradictory when applied to the word itself. If you're talking about 'eased, unforced'...I'd replace the last word, because it makes that sentence sound forced, which is contradictory to the meaning and just sort of throws things off-track in general.
| Alzemu chapter 1 . 11/2/2005
very thoughtful wonderful piece. Yes, I can compare this to my own life and stuff so I should say that it's a sucess. _ good job!
| thornside chapter 1 . 10/29/2005
I haven't really read many fables before (except for Aesop's) so I don't know if I quite understand the format yet or the difference from other stories, but I really related to this story anyway. I remember lying on my back on the beach many times, or in the grass when it was raining and just trying to comprehend the sky but never being able to. Really well written and it brought such a big smile to my face, because I really can remember that feeling and it reminded me of alot of other things I thought I had forgotten. Thanks so much, I needed cheering up!
| ice flyer chapter 1 . 10/24/2005
Awesome. The message is beautiful, clearly stated and elegant. I somehow don't think "My pupils dilating" fits in with the rest of the story - too scientific for your prosy style - but it's great.
| Sarah-Brighteyes chapter 1 . 10/22/2005
Bravo on a very well written fable. To be honest I havent read very many that I have found that i can either relate to on here or that even made me think of it as being a true fable. So bravo to you on that one. *smile*
I enjoyed alot in thie piece, so just to name a few:
- The topic of this. The whole search to find the skies ending. It was brilliantly thoughtout. The descriptions. The searching. The act in itself becoming symbolic for searching for something more in life. I guess you could take this in a few ways. Searching for more meaning or something deeper... or wanting more, like money or materials... but finally finding yourself content with what you have. Wonderfully done.
- I also found your imagery very well done. you described the "pupils Dilating" and the "frustrations" along the way to your "peace" perfectly. I could feel and see what you were doing along the way. i like when I can relate.
- "My pupils dilating as I faced the sunshine, I lifted them ever upwards. I looked and looked for an ending point of that vast blue expanse, but though I strained my eyes to bursting, I could find no stopping point. My gaze became blurred and lost itself in the unending blueness of the sky." this was my favorite part. I just could feel the yearning in this... the want... almost the child in the speaker. I loved it.
This piece was well written. Bravo. When I get a moment I will have to check out some of your other pieces. *smile*
| rrmehta364 chapter 1 . 10/20/2005
i like this fable. deep, but fablesque without an explicit meaning. an interesting subject, kind of like you cant know everything, so dont feel sad when you dont. i think.
| Triden chapter 1 . 10/14/2005
one thing first: I'm sorry for offending you! I meant that sometimes i can tell if people are just reviewing me so i'll review them (ie 'your story is good and i look forward to getting more reviews from you in the future')now to the review: i really like this short little fic/story/fable whatever you want to call it. i get a moral/theme to it, but i can't really put it into words. does that make any sense? maybe the person in the story wanted to know everything but was dicouraged by the sky and gave up trying to understand i rambling? i'll stop now.
again, i'm sorry for offending you! gomen nasai!Triden