Note! I don't actually know anything about Russia. But I'm pretty sure that female names end in -ova, or sometimes -eva.

:)

Hehe...I actually think that zack really is gay...he acts way too drama-queen-ish 2 be completely straight...if not gay, then bisexual...but then again, what do i know...Great story, can't wait to read more of it...im actually really hooked on it and the whole idea...the jesse mystery is also very untruiging...im sure your sitting there doing a (really good, i hope) evil-witch cackle satisfying your sadistic tendancies (lol)...I can see it now...

Great story! Cant wait for more, so update really soon!BIG FAN!

oh nice

the suspense is killing me

please update soon

Hey, I just wanted to make sure you are not going to discontinue this story. I mean, you do not have to updats ASAP or anything. I just wanted to make sure because this is a great story and I really enjoy reading it and I want to know what happens, as well as probably a ton of other people. So I just wanted to make sure you were going to continue this because it is a great story, one of the best.

Happy Halloween (if you celebrate it, of course. Sorry if you don't)

O good story! She's so cold and unfeeling it's almost scary. But I guess that's her characer. Good job so far. I bet the person's Shane by the way.

That's a great you actually speak Russian? I'm amazed that you can get the cyrillic (sp?) alphabet on will there be Romance in the story?

The story is GREAT! Upadate soon please.

Hey. Sorry I haven't review for a while - been on hols and didn't get the chance to access a computer. Why do I get the feeling that it's shane whos coming...and also this Jesse thing is really bugging me - was he an ex-mission who died or and old boy friend or crush or collegue or what! It's quite clear she liked him...and if Max is like him then ...well you get the idea! Update soon!

WOW! I feel so special. I got such a long reviewer response. Yeah for me. I wish I could sound as enlghtened as I did in my last review, but I'm tired.

Anyway moving on...Max caught on quickly. Kudos for him. Of course she got all defensive like i thought she would, but i'm sure when the time comes she'll talk. (Yes I am working on my patience. Kudos to me:))

So we finally see Zack and Alex's past. Very entertaining. And funny. Sounds like something she would do.

UPDATE SOON

~mip*

this story is so good. Alex is a great character.. but i still want more info on Jesse...other then that the story is great.

I'm so horridly indecisive... P Randomness aside, the proper review (may end up short though...)

So Alex's and Zack's relationship is finally revealed. Though it isn't something really all too spectacular or anything, it's still a little cute. However, in that scene, as another reviewer has already pointed out, Zack seems more teen-like than someone who is supposed to have hit twenty already. Yesh... and dig out those History maps now... We're going to Ukraine! P

hmm... Inner conflict...

The one thing I really liked in the chapter was the 20 questions thingy, especially the role reversal at the end whereby it was Max who was doing the shooting of the questions. The last one, especially, made me smile... Not because I'm mad or anything (actually, I am) but firstly, it's rather cute (our vocab's gone!) and also because it kind of hits the nail right on it's mark.

Alex's reaction thereafter turns rather defensive and one can tell that it isn't how she would normally act, given a different situation. She just turned a little scary for me, frigid and icy cold. I have a habit of doing this (especially in my new story which I suddenly feel like putting on hiatus... lol) but try not to let her mope around too much either.

I'm guessing the new comer's Shane (who's car you've yet to send to the junkyard) but I'll just wait. 'Patience is a virtue', isn't it?

Sorry I can't nitpick all that much. I'm not thinking right tonight. After half sprinting and half jogging 2.4 and doing tons of situps and pushups thereafter, I think I'm going crazy...

Oh yar, this isn't supposed to be a 'chat box' now, isn't it?

Anyway, in regards to my previous comments of Max seeming a little simpleminded, he just gives me the kind of impression that he has this sort of one-minded thinking, not in a bad way of course. He seems to make me feel like he has this rather simple (and innocent) view of the world - kind of like someone following his own sense of 'justice' or what is 'right' or 'wrong'... Erm... That didn't make sense.

Maybe what I'm trying to say is that he has a simplistic thinking - that Zack must be saved, that Alex must be helped... I.E. 'Help the weak' kind of mentality and he sticks to it. It may make him seem a little naive at times but also rather sweet and innocent too.

Anyway, thanks for the plug (though I doubt it'll do any good XD) as well.

2 things before I end.

1) You didn't answer my question on whether Jesse's still alive (this one, not JDS).

2) GIVE ME BACK MY COOKIES YOU EVIL PIG! X

Awesome developments. Sorry, I haven't been here in a million years. Anyways, I love Alexis's inner thoughts and her sarcasm, and the plot is intriguing.

The one thing that stuck out at me was the section that began with "Well, it would seem.." because it seemed very informal compared to the rest of your writing. It might be more effective to give all this background info from Alexis's POV, instead of a third-person narrator. It doesn't quite fit the rest of the story's narration. And one more tiny thing: "Yes, you heard right" - typically writers should avoid the second-person "you." Just to be profession, yah? Anyways, nice job!

Okay, I'll start off with flattery, then work my way into (constructive?) criticism, and hope you don't hate me too terribly.

I love your style on this. Smooth, seamless, and there's none of that boring redundancy that's so often seen with descriptions. Really, I'll quit reading something if I don't like the way it's written, and you've definitely impressed me in that area. Futhermore, your characters are charming and lovable, clever and amusing. Also, on a technical note, your grammar and all those details seem just about flawless. Definite brownie points for that.

Alright, now I get gritty. Beware. I don't know if it just took me awhile to realize this, or if you simply started off strongly, but I keep getting the feeling that the conversations don't match your set-up. I really don't know how to describe it; it's as though all of this would fit nicer in a high school setting. On her own Alexis is perfect, but when she's with Zack and Max it feels like they're all much younger than you've said. I'm not trying to be mean here (those cursed words which always imply that I, of course, am being mean) but it gives your story an unrealistic lilt to it. I can believe the basis, the plot, etc., but I have trouble swallowing the the juvenile-ish behavior of Max and Zack. They feel young to me. Too young. Way too young. Preteens, maybe?

Is there any way to age them a little without losing their naivity so nicely woven in?

Again, I don't know what it is, but that's the vibe I get, and I think it puts a crack in an otherwise beautiful story. Oh, and your action scenes are better than most, but there is noticable room for improvement. I only say this because compared with everything else in the story, the action-y parts feels like a tiny sinkhole. You'd be fine if you weren't so good at writing on everything else. It just doesn't feel as strong.

Yeah, I'm being blunt, but I've grown weary of "I love it! Update!" which tells the author essentially nothing. I'm impossibly picky, and I could find two things to whine about on your story. That's it. Two.

Honest to god, the rest is lovely. I'll continue reading, and unless you tell me otherwise, I'll continue to give you my honest opinion. Ask me to quit, and I shall.

I wish I had the time to read...I'm barely cramming in fictionpress and updates aren't even regular...I think the only book I've finished since Christmas was Pride and Prejudice and I read it over my Winter Break...Amazingly, I'm only a high school freshman and pleasure reading is still not an option...Kinda mostly probably because of my inability to stop procrastinating but...heh heh heh...Obsessed? I don't know what you're talking about...Just the fact that I check all of my 143 stories daily...Some of which have actually ended and I'm just saving just in case...That and I love recommending stories (and how else are you going to find the sequels?)...What am I talking about again? Finals week...ugh...Anyway...I'm not even going to take a guess at who she'll end up with...Normally I can make a fairly accurate guess but with my braindeadenness I'm not even gonna try...They're all too close to be able to pick without your brain in peak condition...doncha love how i can ramble about nothing? Anyway, I shall stop boring you and actually go do something productive...Fictionpress updates here I come!

-sigh- Alexis is such a badass. Great story! I like it, and will be checking periodically to make sure you continue with it! :)