this was great. all the wrong words make the right girl, brilliant. and the visuals are striking and harsh. rad. -rabbit

I like this. A lot. From, "skin worn away by sex and cigarettes", to "I like the clove smell / and the way he hates it". With just those lines, I can see this girl, and smell her faintly. This is powerful, this is good. I'm off to see what other writing you're responsible for.

Nicely done. Very creative, and I felt a different sort of sarcasm in the last line that made me chuckle. Great job! :)

This is so wonderful; so much depth and distilled passion. I loved reading it; true talent. Keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.