Nice..."he hears something erupt, but is too drunk to care,"...I like what happened to the Strip Club (God, it's wrong what some of us do to ourselves to get money!). Good riddance. Anywayz, i like it, i think I'll read more of your stuff if you have any (i'm to lazy to check right now). Keep up the nice work.

Oh, wow. My first time reading one of your works after you've read so many of mine, and ... wow. The imagery was amazing, and in great detail. But some of the lines seemed a bit inconsistent... I don't have time to pick them out right now before school, but I felt the need to reciprocate. Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work, that means alot. I'll check your stuff out as soon as I get home.

Amusing little tale.

The timing is a bit off, and the rhyme scheme is inconsistent in a few , excellent work.

The bartender and the strip club remind me of chinese restaurant owners and the chirstmas season.

Keep up the good work

Great poem! It really flowed neatly, and I loved the way the problem was "resolved". You really have talent, looking forward to more humorus pieces.

Unbelieveably cool.

woah. *giggle*

ah, this was great... i couldn't stop laughing. ha ha, he burned down the whole damn strip club. that was great, i loved it. keep it up.

I found this amusing. I like the story that circles it. A bartender loosing business... almost a subconscious destruction of what is destroying your life. Interesting little circle you have here. I loved it.

The flow and Rhyme and Rhythm were excellently done.

You have talent dear Roth... keep it up *smile*

That was absolutely BRILLIANT! Amazing, that all I have to say! Really talented and gifted! You should definately write a whole lot more of humor! Keep it up and please post more on humor!

original, funny - work of pure genius! great work! lol made me laugh, i dont normally read humour but i really should do :D thanks for the review.

Good story. very detailed and desriptive. You'd make a good writter (if you're not already). I was shocked - somehow you got that all to rhyme. I doubt I could pull that off. Anyway, keep it up.

God bless, Lakoria