Reviews for Against All Odds |
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![]() ![]() Man I really, really, REALLY wanted to read this but flaws just keep popping up and I can't deal with the mistakes. |
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![]() ![]() ![]() i really loved it. and i loved chris's character but i hated julia. she acted like a total b***h. but i still loved the story. it made me cry. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well...Your story has a great plot,but you really need to consider getting a BETA. It will improve your you need to go through your story and correct your is very the ending of your story is weird...I really think you will improve your story when you do these things because I loved your story it is very REAL because many wealthy families arrange marriages to their I hope you don't hate me for this review. I didn't want to insult your writing like some of the other reviews. |
![]() ![]() I have one complaint, and one only. And that is the fact that in quite a few of the later chapters, you have the names mixed up. Draco, Hermione, Tre, Malfoy, and Herald are all used for people that AREN'T really Draco, Hermione, Tre, Malfoy, or Herald. :p Other than that, I have just finished reading an awesome story. Definite brownie points go to you and your writing! (: |
![]() ![]() ![]() amazing. story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() nice story, but i didn't understand the random harry potter names. |
![]() ![]() your author notes are just excuses. Don't say oh, by the way, this means this, and I meant to say this but I didn't, or I didn't explain this but.. Go back and fix your chapters. Include that information within them. If anything put in the author's note that you changed/added a few things. Your excuses are pathetic and you won't make it far in the publishing world if you don't suck it up and fix the mistakes. |
![]() ![]() Maybe it's going to sound like Harry Potter in the beginning because: 1) You didn't edit as well as you think you did - mentioning a nonexistent "Bill" and calling the main character Hermione? 2) OR you used the same names? Really...her last name is Granger? 3) Cristiano Rinaldo? Really? If you wanted to write a FanFic you're on the wrong website. I think this could've been a good story if it wasn't written so childishly. You're going to take this as an insult even though it's not meant that way. But, there needs to be more character development, character motivations as well. The situation with the mothers COULD BE believable...if it was fleshed out more. I found this in a C2 and thought it would be a good read, but your writing is immature and your handling of the characters is sloppy. |
![]() ![]() Why is the last name Malfoy? |
![]() ![]() Question? Why do you keep calling Julya Hermoine? |
![]() ![]() good story but the main problem i had with this story is the fact that only identical twins come from a splitting of an egg meaning that the twins would have had to have been the same sex :( |
![]() ![]() this story is not the best, but with a little work it can become a great story. if you don't have a beta, i would recommend getting one to fix up the grammer mistakes. also, watch your tenses. sometimes they constantly switch, and to a well- versed reader, it can be distracting. |
![]() ![]() ![]() aww! great story! I really liked it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hi. um. I'm sure i won't be the first person to tell you this but you should really consider going through your chapters and editing your names. It's a pretty good story but it's obvious that it wasn't first written with these character names in mind. Your fanfiction turned into a really good independent story but every so often a malfoy, draco or ginny slips in. Maybe you should change that as soon as you get a chance? :) |