|Reviews for Were I Not So Scared|
| C.H Manson chapter 1 . 10/22/2005
It's a very bold piece- it holds together well and it says a million words to me.
The fact that it isn't written with a particular flow grasps my attention- and it's a good style, though some may like it fixed.
Good stuff- beautiful work
| angie3838 chapter 1 . 10/21/2005
I like the rhythm of this! I felt like I could actually hear someone reciting this.
A suggestion: while you're good on the punctuation and it really adds to this piece, the repetition of "I'd _" is a little distracting, and perhaps you could utilize punctuation to take its place; for instance, you could take out the "I'd" in the third line of the last stanza because it falls after the semi-colon.