Reviews for Left Out |
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qblisa chapter 1 . 12/12/2006 Wow, you are brilliant. Many times I have felt like that... Wishing to be involved, included. I wish I was invisiable sometimes, to hide the fact that I am alone, because you're right, 'solitude' usually comes 'laced with guilt'. Lisa |
Arichos chapter 1 . 12/8/2005 i can't get over how good you are with this... I think you put my works to shame... |
Boom Kitty chapter 1 . 11/5/2005 You don't need to make the rhyme, your poems are still amazingly real and beautiful. I remain impressed, this poem truly captured the feeling of solitude. |
Tecna chapter 1 . 10/31/2005 Hey... thanks for your fab review for our comic strips... It's me Dev (Just incase you didn't know) the silly girl, Ang keeps reviewing from our joint account, though I don't mind... but back to the main topic...Woahness, that is totally awesome, you must have had an one heck of an ispiration to write summin as fab as this -sorry about my slang- but's the way I am- I so enjoyed this poem, I could imagine the scene -or wateva- taking place... it's so -what's the word for it?- effective? I think it's that word, not sure...But I really enjoyed that, cool! Keep writing! |
Ang-Dev chapter 1 . 10/29/2005 OH...MY...GOD! this is just so beautiful and i hav never been able to put into words my obsession with books. i absolutely adore this. its definitely going on my favs. u captured the emotions, excuses and reasons so perfectly. i couldnt hav done it better myself! i LOVE it. keep writing, ~ang~ |
al-Salil chapter 1 . 10/27/2005 nice-its good-i can connect strongly :-) |
SerAnonima chapter 1 . 10/26/2005 Such an eloquently crafted poem…. Impressive description and attention to detail and imagery… with the unfolding of every word I could not only see what she was seeing but I could also feel the complexity of her emotions as she journeyed on. Beautiful… |
Eloquent-Marionette chapter 1 . 10/25/2005 wow, this is beautiful. nice flow. i loved the line "where solitude doesn't come laced with guilt" i thought that was really clever. great job on this and KW! ~davida |
beti213 chapter 1 . 10/25/2005 rhyming poemsmucho mucho overrated. , I love these lines "She wonders wholeheartedly –How to grow wings." it's just that little fanciful piece that links all of the physical circumstances together. I love it. and also, I guess I feel a kinship with this piece because I've been there. i think a lot of people have been there... way to capture it. |
Rhea Valente chapter 1 . 10/25/2005 Wow... I can relate SO much! Especially growing wings...oh dear... LOVED this poem, wow!I think it's perfect as it is, you don't need to alter it in order to make it rhyme! ~icewolf9 (10.27) |
Aquafied chapter 1 . 10/23/2005 She floats on the periphery- its so i cant write reviews anymore. oh dear, oh dear. She wonders wholeheartedly –How to grow wings.- and that just makes me well written, oh so, oh so. so fly away those social dash all that popularity. |
Aurora Borealis 91 chapter 1 . 10/23/2005 WOw! This was such a realistic poem...It desribed something that we all go through at one time another, and definitely something that many people can relate to. I felt like that a lot of the time but i couldn't quiet place it in words; lol, but i think you did perfectly. I really liked the line "She wishes she was one of them – A social butterfly " because it set the mood for the entire peice and carries a kind of sad tone. You did an amazing job with protraying the message through wonderfully chosen words. Really great use of imagery and descriptive vocab...WOnderful job! lol, n i love to read too! hehe, thnx alot for your revies! n look forward to seeing a rhyme verse! o Keep writing! -Me |
the Scottish Dragon chapter 1 . 10/23/2005 ooh! this is great! I love it! I felt this way too for a long period in my life! But, eventually, i found a group of people just like me! I love your poetry, it's so descriptive and wonderfully emotional! Even if it doesn't rhyme! |
truth is subjective chapter 1 . 10/23/2005 it does convey the anti-social part I guess why must it always be "her"! P |
AikiChaos chapter 1 . 10/23/2005 Lol. I think that it depends on the quality of the verse, free verse, they all are the same to me.I most like these stanzas, "Gazing at the concentric circles, rings of People buzzing, contented With each other’s familiarity" Because I can relate to them, since in the past, I was the sucessfully invoked those feelings with your poems, for better or naught, I don't know . I would use sad to describe the poem but it is lovely work. |