Reviews for Clumsy
StangenBaer chapter 1 . 10/26/2009
I'm crying right now. This one-shot is wonderful!
TheSeer chapter 1 . 10/30/2005
It's too bad you don't usually write slash; you're very good at it. I was especially intrigued by where you chose to end the story. It's a bit of a jolt, because presumably people will be reacting to that last line, loudly spoken, in that place at that time. It makes the reader think about what comes after.

One thing I would criticize, you tend to overuse adjectives and adverbs. A lot of your language is very powerful ("The ghastly parents," for example, and come to think of it that whole sentence) but there's a few places where you just get too flowery (the part where Mrs. Brooks is going on about their friendship, the bit about "supreme peace.") You should go over your work and look at each piece of description, deciding whether it carries its weight or not.
TrunkZy not logged in chapter 1 . 10/25/2005
Beautiful. There’s no other way to describe it. simply beautiful. I’d love to see another fic involving them. Great characterisation, so I’d keep onto them. I really loved it. So terribly heartbreaking to read that last line.