I like Emma's attitude - how she's going to stay strong for Kara, how she's refusing to let people see how upset she is inside. I like, too, how she realises and admits that it is pride and Kara that make her keep herself together, it prevents her from becoming one of those unrealistic characters who are just amazingly immune to stress and grief.

I'm not sure if I've missed it somewhere in the chapters, but I was wondering how old Emma is? I can't wait for more, to see what her mother and her new home is like, and this step-brother of hers! Can't wait to meet her romance interest either :P

Please do post more soon :)

Hey, I thought I'd return the favour of a review and wow - you know how to write a prologue! It sucked me straight in, while the description beginning the first chapter set the scene very well - I got the impression of mourning and a loss even before it was revealed that Kara was crying.

I really liked the line "Nevertheless, I am the reason his eyes closed and never opened again", and the sentences that came before hand; nice use too of "one", because I was in fact thinking just the same thought of murder.

Wow, that's tough of her father to banish Gareth like that - and, as Emma noted, to keep him out of her and her sister's lives too. I thought that perhaps some description of Gareth might be useful when they meet him at the park, I found myself wondering what he looked like.

Oh, wow. I can't imagine how awful it would feel to have your father die like that... I can see why she'd feel guilty, but I don't want her to... it doesn't help ey... nicely written, I'm liking this so far :)

Hi,

I am loving this story. It is extremely well written. I think you write Emma's anguish so well. It is so heartfelt and believable. Her resilience is so clear and her feelings of guilt are very strong.

I like how you have reiterated her feelings of remorse and guilt and her emotionless battle front. You definitely have won reader's empathy with her character.

The scene of her moment with the body is very descriptive and emotive. The way you describe the father's face haunting her is very good and moving. It is very illustrative of where she is in terms of her greif and feelings. It is very well written.

Kara's innocence is also very sweet, however I have to admit that she seems like a very mature six year old after the speech she just gave.

Now you have left us on a cliffhanger. I can't wait to find out more, especially with the mother in the mix now,

Garneau.

Wow this introduction is very thought provoking.

I like it.

It doesn't give much away about the story but enough to get me intrigued.

Garneau.

yes of course.:) I find your writting stile very good.:). I liked the second chapter too. There is so many things that can happen now:D so update;D hehe:D

My mother moved out of state with her boy-toy in 2004, barely moved back in 2005 and wants me to love him like a friend in 2006. You know what I said? Um...no! Please tell me she gets mad at her mom for walking out like that. Please...Well, there's only one way you can tell me. UPDATE!

SF

Aww. She shouldn't blame herself for her father's death. For a while, I blamed myself for my grandma's death, but then I understood that death just...happens. Whenever it's time, God calls us home. Anyway, I loved the first chapter. I think it was REALLY sad, but it was also really good. ON TO THE NEXT ONE!

SF

I really really like this. Everything flowed perfectly. Overall, an awesome story.

i...LOVE!...THIS STORY! plz update soon!

This looks really interesting. PLEASE update as soon as you can, I can't wait for more dude. :-D

- Celie

Hi. I like how you've initiated the story. interesting n sad...write ch 2 soon.

I read this about a week ago but never got a chance to review, cuz the review button didn't load for some odd reason, so I'll do it now!

Anyway, I'm really interested in finding out what happens next. Poor Emma, blaming herself for her father's death. The guilt she must have felt.

The writing is excellent and it draws the readers in, at least with me. I can't wait for the next chapter! _~ Please continue!

Heh. So you DON't accept anonymous reviews...ah well...

Anyway, I like this piece. I'm always fascinated with stories written in the first person narrative as it makes me feel as though I'M the one going through the events and the emotions. I like Emma's personality so far and your writing is outstanding. Too bad, I was willing to believe that it wasn't her that really didn't kill her father but when I read it, it's just obvious that she had a part to play in his immediate death. Poor kid.

Oh and what's gonna happen to the two of them? Emma isn't eighteen as yet to have custody of Kara. I'm thinking that Dareth might take them under his care or probably that they might be shipped off to some orphanage or the other. I hope I'm not looking too deeply into this and giving away some surprise that you might have up your sleeve because I LOVE surprises...thrive on them actually.

Yes, yes, it was a particularly lengthy review. I love to give lengthy reviews for some odd reason unknown to myself. On this last note: please update soon! I'm adding this to my favourites and to my alerts!

Una Flor Hermosa,~Orange Orchids

Nice work! I really like it so far. Love the way you write. Update soon.

Woah. Intense. Good writing! And I love the name Dareth. update. :)

PS. Thanks for reviewing my story!