Reviews for Breach my Promises
Safira chapter 1 . 12/3/2005
I had always found haiku to be amongst one of the most intricate forms of poetry. So little words possessing so much more than what meets the eye. Your haiku does exactly this. The situation portrayed like a haiku is complex. It is rather vague – but it allows for interpretation – and I think I have some idea of what is being said. The few words are striking and vivid to the reader – intense - instigating images and with that emotion. ‘Stone’, ‘womb’, ‘empty’, ‘midnight’ and ‘dawn’ – I am reminded of life and death, broken and whole. Perhaps the most overwhelming emotion for me whilst reading this haiku is sheer hopelessness.

Cheers – Autumn.
boundtobreak chapter 1 . 11/22/2005
Beautiful, thats all I can say...
Smoky Bear chapter 1 . 11/15/2005
well, that was a break from the ordinary blah, yawn obvious haiku that inundates these hallowed pages, very cool.
Fabian Cortez chapter 1 . 11/14/2005
Deep, emotional and intensely moving piece achieved with so few words..

VERY WELL DONE

KEEP WRITING!

F.C
Maxwell Brine chapter 1 . 11/9/2005
Great poem.

I also like the title you gave it.

Keep Writing.
Lowell Boston chapter 1 . 11/9/2005
I really like the questions and images this evokes - Why does he fall? Agaisnt your womb - suggesting a child, a baby or festus, or is this upon the outside of your body? Why is midnight empty, or for that matter, what is an empty midnight - silence? darkness? Very mysterious. Structurally, my only suggesstion would be to change the line break for your second line. End it on 'empty, and allow your last line to be - like the midnight of our dawn. Last, thanks for the review of my poem, The Designer, and thanks for posting.
SeaVoi chapter 1 . 11/6/2005
what a nice simple little poem!
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 11/6/2005
short and powerful
tears-of-innocence chapter 1 . 11/4/2005
This is short, but still so powerful. Love it.
nanashi-04 chapter 1 . 11/4/2005
enchanting, simply enchangting, so many ways to interpret.
flightless blackbird chapter 1 . 11/3/2005
That flows really nicely. I liked it. I'm returning the favor, of when you reviewed some of my poems. thanks. much love, blackbird
AnorD chapter 1 . 11/3/2005
Dearest Juliet. I always admire your work I do hope to speak to you soon. I have been on an absence lately and for that I apologize.

Great job even if it is pain your pen drips ink...

Farewell
Narcotic-x-Poppies chapter 1 . 11/3/2005
oh ..this is just beyond beautiful i love it and now im speechless

Audri
breezy nostrils chapter 1 . 11/3/2005
Nice choice of words...I like.
astral boy chapter 1 . 11/3/2005
If you're talking about what I think you are then this is quite a scary poem. Its briefness is not only haunting but intriguing... and I'm guessing it's something that is troubling you quite a it's very precisely written, and poetically I think it's brilliant.
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