|Reviews for Ventulus|
| J. N. Laerasyn chapter 2 . 11/14/2005
More and more mysteriousness... you're going to make me work for any answers, aren't you? I'm ery interested to hear more description of the world these characters live in- it's structure, setting, etc. Anyway, I have concluded definitively that you are an amazing writer. So descriptive and very... real. Not sure what other adjective to give it. The only criticism I can offer is in the first line of the last paragraph: you use the term "the other" to refer to the girl. It's not that important, sort of nit-picky really, but it just sounds a bit awkward to me. It would not have sounded repetitive to just say "the girl" or something again. Anyways, so good. I have a billion question but I have a feeling it wouldn't do any good to ask them, so I'll just leave you with that. Waiting patiently for the next chapter... well, not sure about patiently...
| J. N. Laerasyn chapter 1 . 11/1/2005
First of all I would just like to say w00t for female FF fans! There are so few of us these days...Anyway, this was an absolutly superb beginning- very mysterious. Your writing makes you sound inteligent and creative. I am very intrigued- beyond words. Please don't be like one of those stupid people on this sie who write one chapter and never update... if you do, I will send Cloud trife after you... hehe. Seriously, I loved it. Keep writing!