Ooh... I like it! Quite the dark touch... no mistakes that I could find... but I suggest that you fix up some of the lines a bit so that it could flow much better with the rest of the poem... other than that... GREAT JOB!

oo, great imagery. i liked the "black clawed grip" part especially. your profile is wrong, your poems dont suck at all! lol. nice work. and btw, i love "Punk Rock Princess" too!

it is a good poem keep writing.

Awesome imagery, and thanks for the review. That one was a favorite of mine, since literally all my dad seems to talk about is the ocean, lighthouses, waves, and some weird relative of ours named 'Windwagon Smith'...I've not a clue, but I do love what the wind does to the waves of gold here at home. Very,very peaceful to , you're not the only one to like rock&roll, and hate everything else. I -heart- NIN. Laters! KD

The devils game... I never get these cryptic poems until about a day later. Half the time they're not even supposed to be cryptic.

Shinies To All!